|Reviews for The Right Thing|
| burnyourlifedown chapter 1 . 6/26/2008
E, I love this one. I feel like this all the time when I'm about to see a certain someone (even though it was usually before third hour ;]).
Thank you; I'm smiling. :)
| deletethisaccountplease9 chapter 1 . 5/19/2008
:) cool! I love it when things work out that way.
| East-0f-Eden chapter 1 . 5/18/2008
that was very descriptive of music.
| Ryan J. Dailey chapter 1 . 5/13/2008
Great piece. Reminds me of a letter I wrote in high school. I wrote a poem about it when she turned me down, it was called on the longest day of my life.
Keep writing, every letter is practice for your masterpiece.
| Getuie chapter 1 . 5/10/2008
I liked the description you put in here that just all reflect that sense of anxiety and nervousness. The line 'my feet made my body walk away' has to be my favourite as it just captured that entire sense of uncertainty/unwillingness/nervousness and more. The shift into warmth and sweetness conveyed mostly in the last verse was also nicely done. I think the only 'critique' I could give was changing the & to an actual 'and' because that was kind of distracting.
| lymli chapter 1 . 5/10/2008
wow, it's sweet I thought about love instead of friendship.
| Jennifer chapter 1 . 5/10/2008
I'm glad that she's happy? You seem really happy in the poem.
| sweets555 chapter 1 . 5/10/2008
Hmm. I'm assuming you made up with her? Or am I totally wrong?
Great poem either way