|Reviews for Beach|
| dragonflydreamer chapter 1 . 5/13/2008
This is a very beautiful hiaku. You used some wonderful vocabulary here and it was nice to start with that alliteration. I can practically see the ocean as I read this. Great job! :D
| thequeerprodigy chapter 1 . 5/13/2008
'evoking late memories'
wow! this three-line haiku envisions a serene scene in a BEACH.
| A Once Dead Poet chapter 1 . 5/12/2008
I like the word choices.
Lazing long winter
the mind revives sand-warmed toes
and ocean calmed heart
| massattraction chapter 1 . 5/12/2008
it captures a certain "nostalgia" if you will,
i would take out the bold and italics though,
let the reader put the emphasis on what they feel stands out.
It'll carry more power that way.
well done ]
| Moondog Dozier chapter 1 . 5/12/2008
Visual, with the movement of thought that a good haiku should have. Interesting burst at the end line. Well done.