Reviews for Beach
dragonflydreamer chapter 1 . 5/13/2008
This is a very beautiful hiaku. You used some wonderful vocabulary here and it was nice to start with that alliteration. I can practically see the ocean as I read this. Great job! :D
thequeerprodigy chapter 1 . 5/13/2008
'evoking late memories'

wow! this three-line haiku envisions a serene scene in a BEACH.
A Once Dead Poet chapter 1 . 5/12/2008
I like the word choices.

Lazing long winter

the mind revives sand-warmed toes

and ocean calmed heart
massattraction chapter 1 . 5/12/2008
Nice mood,

it captures a certain "nostalgia" if you will,

i would take out the bold and italics though,

let the reader put the emphasis on what they feel stands out.

It'll carry more power that way.

well done ]
Moondog Dozier chapter 1 . 5/12/2008
Visual, with the movement of thought that a good haiku should have. Interesting burst at the end line. Well done.