|Reviews for Of Course|
| Distilledfx chapter 1 . 5/16/2008
An interesting idea. The voice of the narrator is annoying, but realistic, they way they constantly say "of course this would happen..." like the world is conspiring against them. You have a different sort of monster in this, thought the hands reminded me of evil dead a little, thats good not bad. The text where you have changed the formatting looks cool and isn't something I've seen on here before so kudos. You build the tension a little bit, but maybe some false alarms would help too. We all hate those predicatble things in horror movies, but they do nonetheless build tension. Nice work... keep writing!