Reviews for Flatterer
simpleplan13 chapter 1 . 5/30/2008
-I turn my eyes away/you ask me if I'm ok?... that's not a question

-why didn't you ask me the same/bitch?... that line totally confused me

-a hungry one with frighten look...frightened

-not doing me any favor...favors

-if you want me to ask you sorry/want me more...that confused me to

-Blindfold me (let's see)... if you're blindfolded, wouldn't you be able to to look at the sun?

-That owner stanza made no sense to me

-tore dress and cheap make-up...torn

Why are the parts in parenthesis double spaced? That seemed odd

The words bitch and fuck aren't really appropriate for 9 year olds if you ask me... I would definitely change the rating

I really like the parts where you say do this and let's see if I can do this. Those were really great. Some of the other parts were great descriptions too. I also liked the formatting with the parenthesis. But some of the piece just really confused me.
The Reverse Edge Blade chapter 1 . 5/14/2008
I liked your repetitions, and the description of your emotions. I liked how you repeated certain words, and the theme. Your rhyming was also really good! Keep at it!

The Reverse Edge Blade
Dreaming Chica chapter 1 . 5/13/2008
Fantastic! A very inspiring poem, that really makes you think about how it can relate to you or someone you know! Well done!

Dreaming Chica
Elliptical Shapes chapter 1 . 5/13/2008
Yes, plenty of hate here, I like hate.

Alan.