|Reviews for Flatterer|
| simpleplan13 chapter 1 . 5/30/2008
-I turn my eyes away/you ask me if I'm ok?... that's not a question
-why didn't you ask me the same/bitch?... that line totally confused me
-a hungry one with frighten look...frightened
-not doing me any favor...favors
-if you want me to ask you sorry/want me more...that confused me to
-Blindfold me (let's see)... if you're blindfolded, wouldn't you be able to to look at the sun?
-That owner stanza made no sense to me
-tore dress and cheap make-up...torn
Why are the parts in parenthesis double spaced? That seemed odd
The words bitch and fuck aren't really appropriate for 9 year olds if you ask me... I would definitely change the rating
I really like the parts where you say do this and let's see if I can do this. Those were really great. Some of the other parts were great descriptions too. I also liked the formatting with the parenthesis. But some of the piece just really confused me.
| The Reverse Edge Blade chapter 1 . 5/14/2008
I liked your repetitions, and the description of your emotions. I liked how you repeated certain words, and the theme. Your rhyming was also really good! Keep at it!
The Reverse Edge Blade
| Dreaming Chica chapter 1 . 5/13/2008
Fantastic! A very inspiring poem, that really makes you think about how it can relate to you or someone you know! Well done!
| Elliptical Shapes chapter 1 . 5/13/2008
Yes, plenty of hate here, I like hate.