Reviews for Amazing
Midnight In Eden chapter 1 . 6/15/2008
First of all, I really like your use of enjambment here. It's well done and creates a great rhythm. I actually like the line breaks more than the rhyme scheme you've got here which does feel a little forced in places.

Couple nitpicks: I think you could get rid of a few of the "empty syllables" in the poem. For example, "our" in line four, "a" in line six.

Overall it's a simple poem but it's quite sweet with the last couplet in particular. Simple but something we can all empathise with.

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Dreaming in Words chapter 1 . 6/4/2008
Nice poem! The imagery is lovely.
Erlkoenigin chapter 1 . 5/15/2008
Das Gedicht ist selbst “amazing”, hört sich nach einem “Lob der Schöpfung an, deshalb sicher unter Religion gepostet?
Eirien chapter 1 . 5/15/2008
This is truly beautiful, it expresses the wonder of creation and how that points to the Creator. The rhyme and rhythm also nicely fit the tone and topic of the poem.
wildcard07 chapter 1 . 5/15/2008
Simply profound...

An oxymoron...that's what your piece is. And I love it. Impressive flow...good choice of words, appropriate division of lines, and the way you started the piece ("amazing, how a field...") really caught me at have it. Keep writing pieces for the glory of inspired me.