Reviews for A House Divided
disused account chapter 1 . 1/25/2010
Ah who does not like a story of enduring love? I really liked it. It was by far your best work yet. Although I did catch a few things you might want change:

In your first bit of dialogue I personally think it should be, "Oh Johnny!" But the rules of English can be broken. Lastly you mention the mother to be tiny and fat, this simply can't happen. Maybe a better phrasing would be "Short and stout."

Your prose always surprises me and I come away happy I read it, Keep up the great storytelling! You have a lot of raw talent, some creative writing professor is just going to adore you. Keep on writing and you'll be published really soon!

All the best,

moongazer7 chapter 1 . 9/20/2008
I really liked this one!