What an amazing ending. I became confused ad to how the two boys could be older. It didn't make sense. The epilogue was absolutely great. I felt satisfied with the ending rather than the usual abrupt end that most amateur authors have(haha myself included).

Yes, clearly an original story... except for the multitude of incredible similaries to The Ballad of Jack and Rose, right? Not trying to be a snotty bitch, though I will acknowledge I definitely sound like one, but this story isn't exactly 'original'. You should at least cite the movie/book as inspiration or something. Those concerns aside, I like it.

This story was just... wow.

Good job.

0.o I was not expecting that ending...

Good story, though.

okay, i know this was incest, but im still a sucker for happy endings. i wish jack hadnt died, but in a way it fits the story. reminds me of how in the bible (i dont mean any disrespect if your not christian, im just pointing out a fact) king david and the woman he had an affair with, well the kid she conceived from their affari died b/c God said it was wrong (she was married when they had the affair, plus david had her husband killed). anyway i just saw the similarity that in both, they were not able to keep what they wanted most (Jack/the baby). thanks for the story though.

please erase the ending- the people reading probably have no more reasons to be depressed :'( please

A really sad ending. It was a nice story with lovable twists throughout the chapters. Good work :)

oh my god. i love this story its seriously hot

heys !

love your story ! i didnt know if you realised but half of chapter 7 is in chapter 8 !

anyways.. in love with your story i wonder if that boy Jack "cares" about is gonna make an appearance ? P

amazing story, i honestly applaud the idea and the way its written,

only tiny problem i have with this is that both jack and hayden are supposedly older than bridgit, they share the same mother, yet bridgits father was the first husband... do you get me?

im willing to ignore this and all, but i mean... i dunno that just majorly clash during the whole story, and i cant even think up a reason to like fix it whilst keeping the stories plot the same. :S

good starting line.

and also good ending line.

Wow, for such an intense them which could have spiralled into absolute crap, you've handled it very well. I'm very pleased that you haven't resorted to having sex in the second or third chapter either. Nice work.

So...fantastic.

Absolutely addicting, as always. C:

Update again soon! PLEASE! CX

Loved It.

Wondering when the acid part was gonna come in.

Update.

What? What's missing?

Acid Ballads, I get it now!

Update soon :)