|Reviews for shades of self awareness|
| AntiPleasure chapter 1 . 5/30/2008
Your writing reminds me of my own, so I like it. :P
Interesting sights in this piece.
| mate.feed.kill.repeat chapter 1 . 5/18/2008
| Tytherpol chapter 1 . 5/18/2008
on my language exam i took last week, there was this one question that i just couldn't figure out, and it asked about self-awareness.
it was like: what word best describes what self-awareness means in line 56 (or w/e)?
and the two choices that i just couldn't decide between were introversion and shame. because usually introversion is a go-for, but shame really was the result and almost type of this introversion. so i chose introversion, and i'm still not sure if it's right.
your fish gave my mind faulkner undertones for the entire piece. :p
which is funny because i always associate him with sawdust too. and your next lines were about timber.
:) and which was also funny when you started beoing a woman.
haha i have too much fun reading cryptic poetry :(
the symbolism in your second "i am" is really weird.
like in a good way, of course, but still very odd.
i was about to say i'm not sure if i understand 'pins' with the breath. but then i realized breath fell under a new "i am"
and now i love it so scratch that
this is a really tricky poem. clever too. but really tricky.
great job. beautiful piece, i think. ~ty.