Reviews for painted midnight
ilithad chapter 1 . 9/20/2008
I'm not sure why you say, "almost" a villanelle, it hits on all the right levels for me. I feel for this person you describe, and it's clear that you do too.
Jacqui chapter 1 . 5/31/2008
A lovely, but heart-wrenching poem. I think it really highlighted the hopelessness that can result from an inability to help a friend("wishing I could bring you out of this half-strangled cocoon"), and how a person can be destroyed by their world ("a script of gloom", "cacophony of despair") very well. You really have a way with words. I loved the references to a "bruised moon", the "egg-shell soul" being torn from its "womb", and "your chalk." I'll never know how you managed to invent these things, Jules. Also, I really thought the repetition of the first lines in the last stanza of the poem was very effective. All in all, a very good poem. It was so deep it made me think.