Reviews for Once Upon a Time
Guest chapter 1 . 8/5/2020
awww i loved this :)
zagato chapter 1 . 6/27/2020
This is sweet, thank you.
BipolarPurpleFreak chapter 1 . 2/2/2019
I hope they got married!
Shailaputri chapter 1 . 10/5/2018
I like the way you write it..But I feel pity for Slick guy and redhead..
Guest chapter 1 . 1/16/2018
I think it's adorable
Aisha chapter 1 . 5/22/2015
super-duper awesome story i ever read!
the story pickle chapter 1 . 5/21/2015
Artemis chapter 1 . 7/22/2014
so cute
So Cute
arimasendeshita chapter 1 . 7/19/2014
I really love this oneshot of yours, it's short and sweet and manages to capture all of their feelings in just a few thousand words.

I especially love the smooth transition from how they were childhood friends to how they drifted apart and how they came back together as they grew up. It'd have been nice to have more details and scenes/conflicts/resolutions before they got back together though, it felt kinda rushed.

And i think you have a really good grasp of the language and your characters! I like how you used 'Redhead Girl' and 'Slick Guy' to describe the two characters, it made it much easier to follow the story since there are lesser distractions from the main plot. And your language was fantastic, you didn't use many bombastic words but it had impact, there was a lot of 'show' instead of 'tell'.

Thank you for the lovely read! :D
QueenJayJay chapter 1 . 4/28/2014
Very cute story, loved it. 3
DragonOwl chapter 1 . 3/16/2014
I love how realistic it was, with the fact they didn't pine away for each other and I love the writing style as well. It's really well written, with all the details added in and the ending was very satisfactory too.
Teen chapter 1 . 1/6/2014
Cool story...very nice.
APassionForReadingAndWriting chapter 1 . 9/4/2013
I think it's a great story! :-)
makemebreakme555 chapter 1 . 7/26/2013
I love this one-shot, it is so cute! Its interesting how you never gave them a proper name, but I thing it flowed better that way. The way you made their relationship progress was very realistic, so I enjoyed that! Lovely story
Mel chapter 1 . 5/16/2013
Oh I haven't realized your fiction dates back from 2008, I don't know if you'll read my comments :S
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