Reviews for Once Upon a Time |
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![]() ![]() awww i loved this :) |
![]() ![]() ![]() This is sweet, thank you. |
![]() ![]() ![]() I hope they got married! |
![]() ![]() ![]() I like the way you write it..But I feel pity for Slick guy and redhead.. |
![]() ![]() I think it's adorable |
![]() ![]() super-duper awesome story i ever read! |
![]() ![]() ![]() Awww... |
![]() ![]() so cute So Cute SO CUTE |
![]() ![]() ![]() I really love this oneshot of yours, it's short and sweet and manages to capture all of their feelings in just a few thousand words. I especially love the smooth transition from how they were childhood friends to how they drifted apart and how they came back together as they grew up. It'd have been nice to have more details and scenes/conflicts/resolutions before they got back together though, it felt kinda rushed. And i think you have a really good grasp of the language and your characters! I like how you used 'Redhead Girl' and 'Slick Guy' to describe the two characters, it made it much easier to follow the story since there are lesser distractions from the main plot. And your language was fantastic, you didn't use many bombastic words but it had impact, there was a lot of 'show' instead of 'tell'. Thank you for the lovely read! :D |
![]() ![]() ![]() Very cute story, loved it. 3 |
![]() ![]() ![]() I love how realistic it was, with the fact they didn't pine away for each other and I love the writing style as well. It's really well written, with all the details added in and the ending was very satisfactory too. |
![]() ![]() Cool story...very nice. |
![]() ![]() ![]() I think it's a great story! :-) |
![]() ![]() I love this one-shot, it is so cute! Its interesting how you never gave them a proper name, but I thing it flowed better that way. The way you made their relationship progress was very realistic, so I enjoyed that! Lovely story |
![]() ![]() Oh I haven't realized your fiction dates back from 2008, I don't know if you'll read my comments :S |