Your writing is incredible. I fell so deeply into this story I didn't check the time; I was unaware of everything around me, I was actually in Cait's world. The story so far is bottomlessly true to life, addictive and perfectly poised.

Please finish it.

silly girl!

Please write more of this story when you can! It is really good. Caitlin is a sympathetic heroine with a unique story and voice, and I'm dying to hear more about her. I really like her narration. I love the way you describe the Bone House. You did a really good job with the atmospshere and the setting, and I really like the twist of Dylan being fifteen. It's unconventional, which makes it interesting. I'd love to know what happens next!

This was beautiful, honestly. I'm sorry, I really don't have much more to say than that, which isn't a bad thing. ;)

Quote from Dylan "if she hadn’t of been in a rush she wouldn’t have left her glass slipper and the prince would never have found her"

Duh, of course that's what Cait is implying, that she didn't need to rush if she had timed correctly. I think Dylan could've come up with something better than that as a comeback, I mean he's just retelling the story.

It seems Cait and Dylan's meeting wasn't in any way awkward which seems a bit unrealistic? And his actions and her thoughts about him gave away the story too much. Like it's obvious she and him is going to have something together. Well that's what I think...

The last part of this chapter made me laugh - I so wasn't expecting Dylan to be that young...!

Wow... I'm definitely going to read more of this! Your idea is really good - it could easily build up into a long story from here. I need to read on and find out what direction it's going in...

“What’s wrong with her?” Dylan asks me, the timid element in his voice betraying his age. - I love the realism of your characters.

Waah! Three-dimensional characters mon vie.

"I was rubbing the tiny tree car freshener along Dylan’s back. If he was going to be all in my face, I might as well make him pine fresh, but I can’t really say that to him, so I just shrug and tell him very sharply to get off my leg." - XD XD HAHAHAHA

"his eyes twinkling as he slams the car door shut." - that seems extremely cliched? Eyes can't literally twinkle, and even metaphorical that's hideously overused. Why not say his eyelids crinkled or something? Another way of showing his feelings.

...well my review has well and truly sucked. But the way you write is almost impossible to criticise. I really wish there was more to read D: but I remember reading that your computer had destroyed parts of the story or something. Even if I never finish this, it's still going in my favourites :)

I really like that you made Dylan younger than thought, it makes the story more unique. Great chapter!

* Dylan translates into meaning from the sea

I geniuely enjoy your work. keep it up!:)

Your writing compliments this story /so/ well. And I love Cait to death. Great chapter, by the way. Thank you for posting and good luck with the next!

;D

aww :( poor girl. I thought dylan was rather sweet though haha. purely platonic, eh? he's quite boyish but it's cute! I am worried about what will go on with her mother, but I hope she takes dylan's offer for being friends, because that would be so so cute.

another great bittersweet chapter.

God, her life just seems to get worse and worse. Well, at least now she has Dylan to sort of brighten up her day and take her mind of things. It was a really good chapter, I like the way you write.

Can't wait for the next one.

I loved this line so much: "I’ve bought a stupid packet of skittles from the vending machine, just for something to do; it’s a vivid red in my hands, like a beacon alerting everyone that I’m still just some silly little kid." That analogy was great! I love things like that.

Also, Dylan made me giggle a little bit, just because he does come across as a bit boyish... and with Cait rubbing pine freshener on him, well... that just made it even funnier. But anyway, Dylan's presence was a nice, light note to the more gloomy ending to the chapter, which kind of makes me fear what kind of things will be happening next in the story.

But, you know, it's all good! I still love this story! So great!

Oh my goodness. I wonder what he's thinking...?

Hey, three years! That's not too bad, ;)

Whew, again, I'm glad this was recommended to me; I like it a lot. How Cait's always kind of struggling with herself, between all the bitterness and trying to stay alive. (I'm such a softy. xD)

Anyway, please update soon! Good luck writing the next chapter, KnittingKneedle! _