|Reviews for The Light|
| Midnight In Eden chapter 1 . 6/15/2008
I have to say I really don't like your rhyme scheme. It's one of those easy and slightly silly rhymes and for me, it completely undermines any meaning you could have with this poem.
I do like your isolation of the last line though, it's a more serious climax to a somewhat playful poem. I also like the questioning nature of it. More of that and perhaps removing the rhyme scheme altogether would really help this piece in my opinion.
Also, check out the Review Marathon, it's part of the Review Game and there's a link in my profile.