I lyk no 2 better cz no cjick culd 4give a dude after cheating 4 a reason lyk that even if he is prince charming himself cz i'd jst say suck it up sister and wreck his car and move on (maybe we culd make an exception if it is leonardo di caprio

I do like the End of Forever better than They. I don't really know why, but I do like how you ended end of forever.

Love the stories!

~*~Ngoc1231~*~

aw thats so nice

I liked both versions, as each had their own good points. "The End of Forever" is MUCH cuter, and also consistent with what I was expecting when I started reading this. It has this raw confrontation between the two main characters that ended very nicely. However, the second version is also clearly a "story", for the lack of a better word. Brilliantly spun words to elaborate on a well known cliché, with almost no insight to your own creativity. It was kind of like when I was on my Beauty and the Beast kick, and read stuff that virtually a better phrased retelling of a story I knew.

In the first version, a lot of things were inconsistent with what our cliché loving sides wanted. I mean, he spills his guts out to her best friend. What kind of confrontation is that? A wimpy one, in my opinion. But the first version also showed a lot of uniqueness, such as Kelly's last line about wanting killing him later. Also, the first version was almost believable. The dialogue is unpolished, in a way, which is how real dialogue normally is. The second version sounds like it could have came out of a romance novel. It's very well written, but completely fiction. Personally, I like completely fiction. I love reading because I love giving up reality for awhile, whatever.

And on a completely random note, fictionpress is crazy for telling us there's a 10,0 character limit. It makes me want to reach the limit, even though it's impossible. They should just not list how many characters we have left. Okay, done rambling now, sorry for wasting your time.

The second version was far better than the first one.

I loved this version!

Kelly was strong, and she stood up for herself. It was really good!

I liked this version, but the confrontation they had was a little...fakeish. Kelly seems like she would be stronger and stand up for herself. But I liked it!

I was completely confused as to the second attempt, I thought maybe it was going to be what happened if they didn't get together but now that I understand (due to the AN, maybe you should think about putting it at the beginning?) it was really good. I think I preferred the first attempt to be honest, it just seemed more real, but I liked the second one too :)

Nicole x

too much! oh man! but i luv reading it!

I like both - well done.

PG

this version is much better. last one was slightly confusing and just ranting and them making no sense what-so-ever. except i did like the part of her friend coming up to him.

aww that was so nice. I'm feeling all fluffy inside! I LOVED IT. Oh and punk rock drummers? Kelly's got taste ;]

That was so awesome. Really fluffy but wonderful too. I don't know what I like better. Both have interesting points. Damn, that was great. Good job, keep it up.

Awh both versions are cute

I really can't decide which version I like best. Both have good sections, but either way, I love them both! Great job with version 2.