Reviews for gritty ruins
HMH chapter 1 . 6/10/2008
I like the image of tangling smoke, because smoke is so intangible it seems impossible.
Scarlett Wynter chapter 1 . 5/29/2008
Very nice haiku. It made me think about our present day society and how all the stuff that's wrong in the world sometimes overshadows the beauty of it. I know that's not what you probably intended though. ;)
Faith Adeline chapter 1 . 5/28/2008
good piece, very strong.

East-0f-Eden chapter 1 . 5/28/2008
wow this was excellent. I like how you say Eden burned. that's really great.
sheisdressedinpoetry chapter 1 . 5/28/2008
if you think the structure is detrimental to your message you don't have to force yourself to make it into a haiku.

it can be a failed haiku

those are just as good.
gg. lass chapter 1 . 5/28/2008

this imagery in this is intriguing.

nice job.

yours until the wind changes,