|Reviews for gritty ruins|
| HMH chapter 1 . 6/10/2008
I like the image of tangling smoke, because smoke is so intangible it seems impossible.
| Scarlett Wynter chapter 1 . 5/29/2008
Very nice haiku. It made me think about our present day society and how all the stuff that's wrong in the world sometimes overshadows the beauty of it. I know that's not what you probably intended though. ;)
| Faith Adeline chapter 1 . 5/28/2008
good piece, very strong.
| East-0f-Eden chapter 1 . 5/28/2008
wow this was excellent. I like how you say Eden burned. that's really great.
| sheisdressedinpoetry chapter 1 . 5/28/2008
if you think the structure is detrimental to your message you don't have to force yourself to make it into a haiku.
it can be a failed haiku
those are just as good.
| gg. lass chapter 1 . 5/28/2008
this imagery in this is intriguing.
yours until the wind changes,