Reviews for Imitation Illumination
wilko4523 chapter 1 . 7/21/2008

this is really good i love the imagery and the ending was certainly amusing lol-yes, why elope with light bulbs haahha

ive edited my thingie lol

i love the beauty of the poem as well and the contrast it makes with the rather creepy and harsh words-for example harsh, boiling, reacting, wired


McKinley Cooper chapter 1 . 6/14/2008
God, that's beautiful. Sch beauty and harshness in one voice.


iloveanimecartoons chapter 1 . 6/9/2008
Um...dude...that was...yeah...

AWESOME's a word I could use. Would it encompass all the feelings inspired from this piece, though? Heh. Doubt it. I really enjoyed your play on words that had a way of going in at least 3 ways at once while staying with a basic theme.

Fav lines:

Out of my soul and onto the flames so they’ll grow

Higher and higher and soon I’m wired

With the newness of electric chemistry

Reacting inside of me

Blue and molten and boiling

Beneath my skin with a feverish glow

Crawling under my knuckles and knees

Playing my parts like piano keys


Yes, why elope with light bulbs

Though they’ll never leave

They’re such a waste of electricity

Great job!
Sir Scott chapter 1 . 6/1/2008
In one word beautiful.

lymli chapter 1 . 5/31/2008
I just felt a lot of passion from this, the imageries were very mysterious and magical for some reason.

my favorite part is:

Because I gave my body over to the sun

And made love to its arms and legs

good poem.
the face in the window chapter 1 . 5/30/2008
wow. you've probably heard this a million time, but: you have such a gift. you really do.


Tytherpol chapter 1 . 5/30/2008
"Impregnated with the expectations of noise"

the whole poem's really honest and well written. i really like it.