|Reviews for Adam: The Irritating Paramedic|
| madman chapter 1 . 6/8/2012
this is amaazing
| An chapter 1 . 5/17/2012
Aw this was so funny and cute!
| mussed chapter 1 . 5/13/2012
You know what would be awesome? WRITING ABOUT ADAM AND JORDIN'S PRE-DATE WOHOOOOOO!
Just putting that out there. *hint* *hint*
| xoxluurve chapter 1 . 12/20/2011
It started off great and original and the narrator was engaging. But then when Adam came they all just fell into a generic role. Adam was that sexy overconfident asshole and Jordin fell into that temperamental stubborn girl who pretends she doesn't like him but reluctantly agrees to go out with him. What really annoyed me was the scene in the ambulance. That was so unprofessional on so many levels. I volunteer a lot in the hospital, and even if I didn't, I know that professionalism should be kept while you're on the job. The girl is bleeding and the guy is flirting with her? (SERIOUSLY?) Their job is to calm them, and just because he's hot doesn't give him the right to use his good looks. That's harassment, especially since it could be claimed that she wasn't right in the head at the time of his "attack" (after all, she was just shot). So yes, I just wanted to point that out. Perhaps work on it from after the paramedics arrive? Your writing style is great, very readable, but the characterization/lack of needs a lot of work.
| its-like-i-sed chapter 1 . 5/25/2011
THIS WAS TOTALLY AWESOME! xx
| non.graceful chapter 1 . 5/16/2011
Beinning good. When it got towards he romance bad
| QuickSilverSand chapter 1 . 5/3/2011
good story, would have liked a second chapter
| ghurl00 chapter 1 . 11/22/2010
| Ngoc1231 chapter 1 . 7/19/2010
Actually, she has a point. Death is quite inevitable but men are quite unpredicable. And I do like the line: "Alright, I've written my number and address on this paper. If you lose it I'll have to look for your cute little ass all over the friggin' city. So don't lose it." I think it is so cute!
Love the story. And he oddly enough reminds me of Milo Ventimiglia, in heroes when he was a paramedic haha. Although milo didn't have a piercing.
| Abrasive chapter 1 . 7/3/2010
The concept was good, attractive, and it started out well. However, after Jordin was shot I felt that it fell flat: Adam was just another cocky, goodlooking guy, like any other. Furthermore, their kiss in the ambulance and all subsequent occurrences were a little too contrived for my liking. I'm aware it's fiction, but there still needs to be an element of believability, and I didn't see that after Jordin was shot.
| LanternLight13 chapter 1 . 5/9/2010
I thought her reaction to being shot was very, er, interesting. Cute story. Thanks for sharing.
| Aiko chapter 1 . 2/13/2010
Your characters are really good/likable and the near-death-by-gunshot scenario is pretty awesome. However, I am pretty sure that medical teams have rules about how they ought to be behaving around patients lest they get sued or lose thier job...
| Beautiful Destination chapter 1 . 12/15/2009
I love how you can put humor in a story about someone getting shot. Seriously. This was brilliant.
| tall chapter 1 . 8/27/2009
Jordin is my hero right now, haha. Hilarious :D
| tempe-love chapter 1 . 6/10/2009
That was awesome! Great Job! :)