Hahahaha Jee that was crazy one...eh Adam is sexy hahaha

It's good! I enjoyed it! :D

this is amaazing

Aw this was so funny and cute!

You know what would be awesome? WRITING ABOUT ADAM AND JORDIN'S PRE-DATE WOHOOOOOO!

Just putting that out there. *hint* *hint*

It started off great and original and the narrator was engaging. But then when Adam came they all just fell into a generic role. Adam was that sexy overconfident asshole and Jordin fell into that temperamental stubborn girl who pretends she doesn't like him but reluctantly agrees to go out with him. What really annoyed me was the scene in the ambulance. That was so unprofessional on so many levels. I volunteer a lot in the hospital, and even if I didn't, I know that professionalism should be kept while you're on the job. The girl is bleeding and the guy is flirting with her? (SERIOUSLY?) Their job is to calm them, and just because he's hot doesn't give him the right to use his good looks. That's harassment, especially since it could be claimed that she wasn't right in the head at the time of his "attack" (after all, she was just shot). So yes, I just wanted to point that out. Perhaps work on it from after the paramedics arrive? Your writing style is great, very readable, but the characterization/lack of needs a lot of work.

THIS WAS TOTALLY AWESOME! xx

Beinning good. When it got towards he romance bad

My opinion

good story, would have liked a second chapter

Cute!:)

Actually, she has a point. Death is quite inevitable but men are quite unpredicable. And I do like the line: "Alright, I've written my number and address on this paper. If you lose it I'll have to look for your cute little ass all over the friggin' city. So don't lose it." I think it is so cute!

Love the story. And he oddly enough reminds me of Milo Ventimiglia, in heroes when he was a paramedic haha. Although milo didn't have a piercing.

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The concept was good, attractive, and it started out well. However, after Jordin was shot I felt that it fell flat: Adam was just another cocky, goodlooking guy, like any other. Furthermore, their kiss in the ambulance and all subsequent occurrences were a little too contrived for my liking. I'm aware it's fiction, but there still needs to be an element of believability, and I didn't see that after Jordin was shot.

I thought her reaction to being shot was very, er, interesting. Cute story. Thanks for sharing.

Your characters are really good/likable and the near-death-by-gunshot scenario is pretty awesome. However, I am pretty sure that medical teams have rules about how they ought to be behaving around patients lest they get sued or lose thier job...

I love how you can put humor in a story about someone getting shot. Seriously. This was brilliant.