Reviews for The Art of Seduction |
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![]() ![]() ): what happened... Why didn't you continue... |
![]() ![]() ![]() you HAVE to keep going! You cant leave me hanging here like this! Its MEA- write as if your life depended on it! |
![]() ![]() ![]() sounds fun. she's crazy. more soon please. |
![]() ![]() ![]() I feel for you main characeter, and its sad because men actually do that sort of thing. she doesnt deserve that, no one does. im also a hopeless romatic, and its a shame that romance is dead. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Love it. Your writing has a maturity that is uncommon to fictionpress. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Review Game! I like how your story is coming along so far. You seem to have a firm grasp on this story and you are conveying your ideas well. Personally, I don't like Genevieve, but I think she is a well-developed character. You gave her the beauty and the perfect body, but you gave her plenty of faults to balance that out. Your pacing in this is also good. You established enough about the main characters for the reader to understand what's going on, but you still got the plot rolling to keep it interesting. My only objection to this chapter is that you crammed all the physical descriptions for Lucas into one paragraph. To me, anyway, it stuck out like a sore thumb. Try to work that information into the story a bit more subtley, perhaps from Genevieve's point of view? This is off to a nice start. This has a lot of potential. |
![]() ![]() ![]() this is good so far keep it up! |
![]() ![]() ![]() this is going great, keep up the good work! |
![]() ![]() ![]() oh! So cute/cool! This chapter is awesome. I like how she's quick on her feet. Update soon! |
![]() ![]() ![]() Nice, it seems you are improving in the description area! Though I think it would be funny if you expanded a bit more on Genevieve's night with Mr. Neilson. Anyway, good work! |
![]() ![]() ![]() That was really good. So they are in China? Is she american or Chinese. please explain, i tend to do really stupid things if something confuses me. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Hey wow! Its gud. But plz b fast with ur nxt chapter. Y dnt u post 1 everyday? |
![]() ![]() ![]() Wow. She's a good assistant. Nice work. Please update soon. Have a lovely day. ~Twilight Starr~ |
![]() ![]() ![]() ‘Honey, if you wanted me to take off this shirt, all you had to do was ask nicely,’ Ahaha! That was classic bad on his behalf. HAHA. I want to see what happens next. ] Update soon. -dmn. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Ok, so the first chapter was just like this movie. Seducing Mr. Perfect. Here's the sypnosis. Synopsis Min-joon, an absolute believer in true love, dedicates herself to the men she dates, but each time it results in a painful breakup. Today, she’s going through the most disastrous heartbreak ever – being dumped on her birthday! The confident professional Min-joon can be so clueless when it comes to love. Distracted from this unpleasant surprise, she bumps into an exotic foreign car. A very handsome young man steps out of the car angrily. To escape from the scene, Min-joon pretends not to understand English, but when Min-joon arrives at work, she finds out that the foreigner, Robin, is none other than her newly appointed boss… Anyway, I loved that movie so that fact that you're making a story is pretty awesome lol. I can't wait to read more. Update soon! |