Reviews for Heart Lotion SPF 20
Aretice N. Treader chapter 1 . 1/17/2015
I think I like this story so far. Your grammar is excellent as far as I can see, and I enjoy the writing style. I don't know if I really approve of the Five's pastime during school, however. I think that the fact that Debbie Fairweather is (probably) over twenty years old and is still in school is puzzling, as with the Five. I'm sure it'll be explained in future chapters. This first chapter was written exceedingly well. It leaves the story open for the next chapter well and introduces the main characters in detail without giving too much away. Great job!
ClippedNinja chapter 26 . 12/8/2014
Wow this is such an amazing story!' I really can't wait for the next chapter you've clevely planned this out and it's sooo exciting when pieces are fit together and make real sense :D I read that you've been really busy with work and I hope you get a breather soon! I would really love to know what happens in the end eventually! I will just have to be patient and hope all goes well for you cause this story is amazing :D
Lexi Eraka chapter 26 . 11/23/2014
Oh... My gosh.. Can't Believe with only four chapters left you stop updating lol and with that type of cliffhanger? Found your account today and since you're a great writer I'll follow this and see if you update anytime soon. :)
tiltedHead chapter 26 . 10/16/2014
I am so in love with this story you are an excellent writer. The funny banters among the characters make it easy to fall in love with them and thus in love with your story )
iamleslie chapter 26 . 9/30/2014
i can't wait for the next update...
Edna-Mode413 chapter 26 . 9/21/2014
WORST CLIFFHANGER EVER GAAAHHHH IM DYING TO KNOW NOW but there's been over a year hiatus so yeah... Not too hopeful about that but who knows...

I knew Gabe was suspicious but it all boils down to the "why?" Because each individual has his/her own backstory. Hopefully life hasn't kept you toooooo busy so you can finally finish this spectacular, spellbinding story
Edna-Mode413 chapter 12 . 9/20/2014
The tone and feel of this story reminds me of "The Raven Boys" by Maggie st... (Something) o.O although I personally like Adam better than (the lead male male character in raven boys; totally blanking on his name)

But kinda strange since this was written waaaaaaaaaaaayyyyyyyyyy before raven boys was published lol
Guest chapter 5 . 9/11/2014
Omg I laughed laughed and died
GinzzzRoxxx chapter 26 . 8/15/2014
You don't often get twists like these when you read free online romance novels. Colour me impressed.
Lildreamer's handguide chapter 26 . 5/9/2014
Holy shit.

How long has it been since ive read this?! With the worlds most heart wrenching cliff hanger too? ?

On behlaf of the other bunnies for this honey of a story please update!
thatweirdgurl97 chapter 26 . 5/8/2014
my princess ending chapter 26 . 3/9/2014
You can't do that! Please come back and update the last two chapters. I'm begging you. This story means a lot to me because I love Honey and she's so different from all the heroines in other stories. Please come back.

With love,
my princess ending
my princess ending chapter 25 . 3/8/2014
VENA! How could you do this to Adam and Honey? You're giving them no choice and it's hurting my soul. And how could you do that with Jesse?! I don't understand how they could still care about Eve through all the crimes she's committed. I don't understand how Jesse can still love her. Nothing makes sense with them. Please don't kill Adam or Honey, my dear.

With love,
my princess ending
my princess ending chapter 21 . 3/6/2014
I KNEW IT. Everything clicked the moment you mentioned "Adam and Eve". Every one of them died because Adam and Eve are supposed to be soul mates and they all are killed by her because they're in the way of things. EVERYTHING MAKES SENSE NOW. I UNDERSTAND SO MUCH MORE. This is so creative and smart. You're a genius.

With love,
my princess ending
my princess ending chapter 16 . 3/4/2014
I'm so sorry but I feel no love connection between Adam and Honey. I mean, I know they're the main couple in this story but I don't see her falling in love at all. I know Adam is attracted to her and may even actually like her because there are a lot of things to like about Honey. I freaking love her not only because of the basic "omg the heroine never gives up and I admire her" but because she's genuinely funny and she sees the good in people despite what they're doing AND she's not cliche. Whereas I know absolutely nothing about Adam and I don't see her falling in love with him. I know he's drop dead gorgeous and mysterious but he doesn't open up to her at all. He's so closed off I don't even know what she could possibly love besides his face. Please explain it to me because I'm losing the love connection. Anyway, I enjoy the way the story is paced, slow but not agonizingly slow. :)

With love,
my princess ending
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