|Reviews for The Call at 3:15|
| disused account chapter 1 . 6/9/2008
Man...great but i'm drepressed. So true. So sad. When I feel happy again I can tell you its GREAT! PUBLISH IT! :D
| London86 chapter 1 . 6/8/2008
This is a very great poem - it brought tears to my eyes! You have a great sense of rhythm that carries the reader through the piece easily. I loved the little details you put in about your relationship with him.
The only suggestion that I have is to watch your tense changes. The poem goes from present, to past, to even further past without any line breaks or transition. If you want, you could switch the last paragraph to the front and make the rest past tense.
Excellent poem - keep writing!