Reviews for His Baby
sydchan chapter 2 . 8/4/2008
This is probably cheating to get you your 30 reviews, but whatever. Ire better watch out, I bet when Laiden meets him (if he does) he'll end up getting the wrong idea about his relationship with Erin.

And at the end, did you mean Ire was trying to convince the doctor the child wasn't his instead of was his? I wasn't sure if that was a typo or not.
sydchan chapter 1 . 7/31/2008
Yay, a mpreg story! I like this so far, it has potnetial to be really good. I laughed when Erin called him Jo-Laiden at the end. It sounds like some kind of gangster/rapper name.
chrisfri chapter 3 . 7/26/2008
WTH? the story's good but how can u cut the story at a crucial moment like GOOD or BAD people who want him. i don't wanna die in suspense. HELP ME by CONTINUE THIS STORY.

Fallen Rayne chapter 3 . 7/25/2008
Omg...that would be a nice thing to answer the door to. A must update and soon X3
BvT chapter 3 . 7/20/2008
Sounds really cool! First mpreg story I have read on fictionpress.. i have read a couple on fanfiction but only found 1 i really liked! This one i'm starting to really like
Esquirella chapter 3 . 7/17/2008
Another CLIFFIE? You are so mean to me.
theozgirl chapter 3 . 7/17/2008
Okay, I want to know what happens when Laiden finds out he's going to be a daddy. Sounds like his family already knows. Also wonder Erin's life is going to change. Not only is he pregnant, which will cause major changes, but the father of his baby is a wealth, high profile, mob boss. Sure would like to know how Erin feels about the idea of the mob boss being the father of his baby. I'm not sure how I would react to something like that. Kinda scary for him and the baby.
myoregon chapter 1 . 7/16/2008
Damn, they won't let me review more than once. Oh well, since I didn't review chapter 1, I'll sneak this in. I just wanted to tell you to not worry about the people complaining about spelling and grammar and such. Unless they are willing to start paying you to write the story, they really shouldn't complain. If they don't like, they don't read, no harm done, no money wasted. That's the nice thing about this kind of online fiction. It's free. Also, the mistakes you make don't really deflect from your story. It's a great story. So you just keep going the way you are and don't let other people get you down. Besides, what does it say about your story when the people that complain, still come back for more. :D
myoregon chapter 3 . 7/16/2008
Wow, you sure know how to keep a person in suspense. I love that that story is moving along so well. It drives me crazy when things drag out for multiple chapters. You've got me what kind of role Ireland is going to play in all this. Actually, you've got me thinking so many different scenarios. You've got such a promising plot going. Can't wait for more. If I write 30 individual reviews, will that count? Because I'm perfectly willing to do it. ;D
Lassitude chapter 3 . 7/16/2008

Cliffhanger endings must be your specialty!

I wanna know what's gonna happen next!

[falls down and worships BlackRage]
kiki19857 chapter 3 . 7/14/2008
a twin of a boy and a girl?
Indalecio chapter 3 . 7/14/2008
i luv ur claimer, it made me lol.

YAY! An update!

a gun in hand is not how i expected them to get Erin.
nitroglycerin and cyanide chapter 3 . 7/14/2008
You probably get this a lot, but where is the baby going to come from? I understand C-section but still. Let's push C-section out of the way.
Keshuoo chapter 3 . 7/14/2008
I noted a typo. You typed "distroy". "It's spelt "destroy."

Nice chapter
Keshuoo chapter 1 . 7/14/2008
This was a great first chapter! I really enjoyed your writing style, however I did note a few mistakes.

*When writing in first person, you write in past tense. "I walk" should be "I walked".

*There should be a space between hurt and My. It should read like this "hurt. My" It's at the beginning.

*I think "names" should be written "name's"

There were other mistakes, but I can't find them right now. I loved the note at the beginning. Great job! I'll be reading more.
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