I think this poem is great, it paints a very clear picture.

If I can offer a suggestion, accidental rhyming is a pet peeve of mine. For example...

"and you sip your tea

and I don't think you heard me"

Beautiful writing though, thank you.

Ahh, I love this so much.

The ending line in parantheses really just ties it together. It's like something that everyone gets but can't put into words. But you have.

Fabulous. (:

Wow! I started off thinking it was a bit mushy and didn't make sense, but then I really got into it. Once I understood it, I read it again and again.

I like the bit about the squirrel, and how perhaps it wanted to die. It shows us things from a different perspective. I also like the last 4 lines... very shock inducing and thought provoking. Maybe the space between life and death isn't so vast after all.

Thanks! x

Excellent. Great imagery.

Oh, I like this one a lot. It's a theme that you write often, but it's written in a new way from you. Good job.

P.S. I'm still jealous that you can keep your lines short.

I think the fourth stanza should have a period after it.

I got confused towards the end because it seems like the scene is set at a table or something reading a newspaper and drinking tea and coffee and then you're in a car. Maybe the car this is hypothetical? I got a little lost.

I like this because it's so very true. I love how you did the thing with the bitter & black from the coffee, it was really interesting and worked well. I also liked the ending a lot.

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'it's pretty twisted but i know it suits me'

there's so much biting, sarcastic imagery in here. those are what stood out for me. the way you start to describe something and crush the stanza quickly with an angry retort. it was really effective i think.

Wow. That was so intense. Just...everything. This is very good poetry. I especially loved stanzas 3, 5, and 8. I know, I could just say them and make it easier on you, but I'm cruel anyway. Why replace personality with something prettier? Sort of like this title. It is twisted, but it's good to know. And I also really liked your author's note, because I know that sense. Wonderful job.

Awesome poem. I liked the mention of the squirrel. It really brought the idea back to the present. ; Or something like that.

the ending is BRILLIANT. i love this and i'm adding it to my favourites.

thus concludes my as-per-usual crappy review.

rowan.

this is the exact type of style that I love in poetry, and that I wish I could write. It was fantastic.

It does have a sort of surreal-real feeling. I understand every build up leading into the crash, and it all makes sense. I like it.

i really liked that poem very nice though the ending was a little weird it was okay

"as you swerve to advoid

a squirrel

that might have been trying to die

anyway"

wow, you put a different spin on it, don't cha?

i like that, never thought of it that way, like

fucking suicide.

somehow the last line sounds so refreshing like

smoke, & burning and i keep thinking of cigarettes.

it's different,

a different style.

:)