|Reviews for Butterfly Fletching|
| Jess Megan chapter 1 . 6/17/2008
I'm going to be reviewing as I read...so sorry for any sloppiness!
"My mother set out a small plate of pastries, which immediately alerted me that this was serious. We were well-off for commoners, but pastries were still only a rare luxury for our family."
I think you can omit commas here.
"And as any seven-year-old knows, when your parents buy you a special treat, it means they want something from you." I just really liked that. Its true even at 19.
I like how your characters mother has honey colored hair and is a beekeeper.
I'm really impressed actually. I don't have much to criticize, if anything at all. It was very realistic and your character was really well developed. Good job!