Reviews for stillframe
cassi crysta chapter 1 . 11/15/2014
hm. Im getting this fairytale image when I read it. hazy and unreal and quickly gone. good stuff.
C.J. Mahan chapter 1 . 8/16/2008
Your talent hasn't diminished. It's been a while, but this is just as good as everything else you've written.

Don't lose the ambition

she smolders chapter 1 . 7/3/2008
You had me at the second line, I really love reading your poems. Take care.
Midnight In Eden chapter 1 . 6/15/2008
I love your enjambment in the first stanza. There's a fabulous structure that creates a cohesive flow in those first six lines. The imagery is also solid (though I'm not a big fan of "red red", feels too over-the-top) and I can not only see them in that moment but feel what they're thinking - great work in only six lines.

I'm just not sure about that final couplet. It feels too abrupt and oddly out of place in a more lushly vivid piece (the first line borders on trite right now). The "however small" just feels like an odd climax, like no climax at all really. Just stagnant words.

That said, I did really enjoy this piece.

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thursdays and rain chapter 1 . 6/12/2008
hmm.. i think there's something off in the last lines.. but other than that, great job.. nicely done ;)
Ashelin chapter 1 . 6/11/2008
Hmm, interesting poem. I'm not sure if I fully understand the significance of the last stanza it was so entirefly vague. Though who am I to complain, since I so often am vague myself. Leaves the reader guessing I suppose. Good job.