Reviews for Forbidden Touch |
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Pride will destroy me chapter 6 . 2/21/2009 Alex...Being nice? :O lol xx Keep Updating You Rock my Socks with this story - Sam |
readaholicxxx chapter 6 . 2/19/2009 wow alex has finally shown his nice side! i feel really sorry for Eva i mean getting whipped and then having someone she thought was evil and her enemy showing compassion must be kinda confusing dont ya think? |
anon chapter 6 . 2/19/2009 so i read the chapters for the first time and i like them so far. i mean alex is a jerk but after the 6 chapter i am hoping he is different.. well i hope u update soon! |
heartbreak warfare chapter 6 . 2/18/2009 Oh no! Poor Eva [ Gosh, he's just so darn awful. and it was horrible to read about the whole whipping thing. it's sad that she's at his mercy she tries to stick up for herself, but she can't! I'm glad you finally updated, i was waiting for that for a while. i hope he becomes nice to her lol, but that might take a while XD |
Whyler chapter 6 . 2/18/2009 Yay! Another Update! Please please please try to update more often! Bella |
kikchaka chapter 6 . 2/18/2009 wow! I like the nice side of Alex |
xoxokristen chapter 6 . 2/18/2009 Really interesting, I am so glad that we might be seeing a nice side of Alex. I think that Alex should have Eva with him all the time, like a personal maid or something, wasn't that in the summary? Are we not there yet? PLEASE UPDATE AGAIN SOON! |
xoxokristen chapter 1 . 2/18/2009 Hey so I really like your story and I think that it is wonderful, but you have some spelling and grammar errors that really distract me from the story. It makes you a much better writer when you have the right words and grammar. So, I am going to help you. 1) discussing (2nd paragraph) should be disgusting. she is not talking to an insect, she is gross insect. 2) miss Mar (5th paragraph) should be Miss Mar 3) In the paragraph starting with "Every day was the same" Every day should be Everyday and you have some comma slices throughout the whole paragraph (ie. "He had the finest, and biggest room" doesn't need a comma) 4) In the paragraph starting with "He just wasn't going to stop" the last sentence should be "My heart was pounding like a great drum" unless, of course, her heart is pounding on a drum 5) Just an overall comment, every time someone speaks it should start a new paragraph. You do it for the most part, but some "..." are in the middle of paragraphs. Sorry if this was incredibly annoying. I mean what do I know right? I am not the author. I just thought you might want to know. Your other chapters have similar problems, but it takes me an incredibly long time to point this all out so I won't be commenting on the spelling and grammar anymore. |
imansouren chapter 6 . 2/18/2009 i really enjoyed this story. it made me laugh and cry. well done- update soon |
darkgurl92 chapter 6 . 2/17/2009 aww..how nice of alex..maybe he's changing.. update soon |
Kaela chapter 6 . 2/17/2009 The ending was nice! Very unexpected PLEASE UPDATE SOON! |
Keloiu chapter 5 . 2/16/2009 great story, i love it...please update soon :) |
i love life chapter 5 . 2/13/2009 oh pooe eve... and whata b*s*t*rd gr8 story update soon pls |
heartbreak warfare chapter 5 . 2/8/2009 I hope you update this soon, it's definitely one of my favorite stories! Good writing, I love the plot! |
kaela chapter 5 . 1/21/2009 update please! ! |