Wow! :) This story is coming along really well and I definitely enjoy getting to know Alex's thoughts better! I was just wondering if you could tell me what year this is set in? I got pretty confused throughout the story. I reallyy hope that you update soon or at least have a good reason for not updating in so long! ;)

Peace, Love and Happiness! :)

~Bubbly Girl

From this chapter, Alex seems super sweet and all the chapters where it is from his point of view. At the same time, all the things he has done has been kind of harsh and cruel. I know he saved her and that is probably the greatest gift ever, but he still has his moments where he is a big fat jerk. It can be hard to forgive him for his actions. I hope you do continue to update.

Omg.

Omg.

Soooooooo intense.

You don't know how amazing it makes me feel,

to see Alex's soft side!

And how he feels the same way about Evaaa!

Please update soon,

this is really amazing!

absolutely beautiful all of these chapters. There are written very nicely with off course the exception of a few grammatical/spelling errors. I at first always had a feeling that Alex had liked Eva, just that tingly feeling hehehehe lolz. I like the transition from the cruel Alex to the nice,loving Alex. This story has sooo much potential and plot twists such as with Tyler and if it'll be ok for Alex and Eva to be together. & also who's Eva's father, i think he's some rich guy or something so.

Really would love to see this updated, it is such an interesting story and it needs updating.

Wishing you nothing but success in your writing.

Wish to see an update too:)

Great job, please keep it up.

~Smiley NiNi

Alex is a butt face :C What time period is this by the way? Intrigueing first chapter though.

Well, at least he knows that he has to tell her...

XOXO

Where's chapter 4?

this is a really good story. very captivating :)

although i am extremely confused as to the timeline. the way you're writing makes it seem very old fashioned and there's the whole slave thing, but the cars and washing machine suggest otherwise.

girl where are u? plz update soon

I love it

Yeah, you should definitely put this in modern times. The restaurant scene seemed incredibly modern and I don't think it would be quite the same in an earlier time period. Keeping it modern also means little to no research to make your story fit.

Cheers

~~sharky

Oh, yes, more Alex pov! It is always nice to get into the head of the other characters in a first-person story.

You have some grammar issues and spelling mistakes (cheek not check, intentions not intensions, surely not surly, etc.), so you probably want someone to do some light editing on this chapter for you.

Cheers

~~sharky

Okie dokie, I am going to offer you my advice (which you don't have to take) because you seem to have a little bit of trouble placing this story in the correct time period. Let me just put some time-period contexts to some of the things found in your story:

Indoor toilet: Late (very) 1800s.

Blue Jeans: Not popular until 1950s

Taxi cabs:1890-1907, and not painted yellow until they reach New York in 1907

Soccer Jerseys: Plain cotton t-shirts in the 1800s, fully colored jerseys in 1921, and definitely not drawstring until at least 1950s when soccer jerseys were in full-swing.

Beeping alarm clock: Not until mid-1970s.

Deoderant: Not distributed until the 1950s.

Limos: Stretch limos first appeared in the late 1920s.

Juice "bottles": I am not sure on this one, but to me it implies plastic-1950s.

This story is written with a very modern mid-set (the language is incredibly modern) so, in my opinion, don't do yourself a disservice by trying to put it in a past time period. Keep it the way it is, heck, even make it more modern. Just put the story in a fictitious country that allows, not out-right slavery, but some pretty crappy working conditions for the poor and no agencies to monitor worker treatment.

I hope this helps with your dilemma. Oh, and please don't take any offense to this, I only wanted to be of help.

Cheers

~~sharky

AW his father freaks me out.

Alex. That is an extremely ODD way to like a girl. Never really knew some guys went for that kind of stuff but whatever floats his boat. The adoring pack mule was really weird though but funny. Just really odd in general, but still sweet. (: