Reviews for I wish I knew
Yasona Black chapter 1 . 6/15/2008
I like the ending with the double "I wish I knew," but as a whole the poem seems rather sparse. While it feels like there's supposed to be a lot going on, it jumps from one idea to another without really taking the time to reflect on anything. Perhaps if you described the pain and violence, give examples of what you were supposed to see. How were people ruined by foolish words? What happened, what did they do? And maybe, you certainly wouldn't need to, but you could try and see what happens if you reflect on why "people are so cruel to each other." The idea is good, I just think you need to work on being a little more descriptive. (You can also completely disregard this review if you so wish. It is only my opinion.)