|Reviews for Slipping Away|
| sooner or later its over chapter 1 . 6/15/2008
i cant say that i know what you're going through, because i can't it wouldn't be possible. but i know that ive had some of those same mixed feelings about a friendship [because i lost four very close ones within a year. i know i break records.] anywase just wanted to say that i really liked this piece because i could feel in a way connected to what you were saying.
hope everything ends up working out.
| Liebe Dance chapter 1 . 6/15/2008
First off, I'd like to say that I can completely relate to this. I've been in that position before, and it just sucks beyond almost anything else.
But, now to the poem. I feel like it was more prose chopped up and less poetry. The emotion was there, but if you used some rhyme or meter it might seem more like a poem. I know you prolly don't wanna rework it, but yeahh. I do like how you repeat things like "I misunderstood" and "you misunderstood" or the repetition of certain words in stanzas, like "feel" in the 2nd stanza.