Reviews for Timber |
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![]() ![]() ![]() This was very very good. It kept my attention the entire time. The only thing that I actually want to critique is when you use the word 'sigh'. Maybe have it in italics? Or perhaps quotations but that could be just me. Other than that I really enjoyed this. It was very real. Good job. |
![]() ![]() ![]() this is beyond confusing. you really need to watch how you phrase things. Say She walked out. not You walked out...sorry i'm not in the story. watch your grammer. make sure you keep the same tense current or past...choose. i get the whole you see what she's thinking thing, but you mix it in to much with the actions therefor making it hard to understand. This is not a flame. Constructive critism the story could be great. just fix it up heaps |