|Reviews for The Break Up|
| Engineer of Words chapter 1 . 11/27/2008
You know, I wish I could find something to critique, but I can't. Nice work.
I really enjoyed reading this, especially in part to no lack of well-written violence. And the irony at the end is just icing on the cake.
| Aiko-Moon chapter 1 . 9/23/2008
This isn't really my thing, the whole assasin like stuff. But you did a good job on it. i was surprised that I was able to read through the whole thing. Normally if it doesn't interest me then I stop reading. But this was very well writen. So good job. :)
| FrameJock chapter 1 . 9/12/2008
"Hell hath no fury..."
Jeez and wow.
Well written, crisp and smooth. Katja's pain is very real and compelling. Can't wait to see more of this lovely lady.
| Caecilia chapter 1 . 8/15/2008
I love your descriptions. Especially in the whole Eddie being shot repeatedly scene. It's so vivid.
I love Katja's stories. She's definitely an interesting character. I really love the dark humor that is throughout this story. I'm a sucker for a piece of dark humor.
Amazing stuff you have, Zerom. I'm addicted. Now I have to go read more...
| Mrstress chapter 1 . 8/13/2008
This story was just as good as the last one, and I thank you for that.
I also want to thank you for not calling a surpressor a silencer... It's the little things that matter, ha ha.
| Thoughtful Silence chapter 1 . 7/19/2008
Alrighty, first off... I love the sardonic, kinda dark humour that laces this. It was a nice piece, with a little romance, a little tears and then a little Mk. 23. The way you integrate little details of the characters throughout the story was a nice touch, even though it seemed a bit... excessive at times (I.E. when Katja was leaving the hotel and you detailed her entire attire).
The thing about this is... even though he's a complete bastard, I prefer Eddie in this story. Katja is too, I don't know, bipolar in personality? One minute tears, and thinking 'bout taking him back (despite said cheating, thieving and general attempted murdering) next first-class killer... Though I did like how that added an inherent 'human side' to her. She's not one of these 'cold' assassins that are all too frequent.
I liked the ending, but I didn't like it... if only because I have NEVER heard the saying "break-ups can be murder on an individual". I would take out everything on that line 'cept for 'break-ups can be murder' just to cement the effect of the... I wanna say cheesiness?
Another thing 'bout this, I found, was that some of the sentences were really long, with an abundance of adjectives, adverbs and nouns invariably mixed in with every punctuation mark, except for a full-stop. Don't get me wrong, they are good, descriptive sentences (which are what most stories lack) but some lines I had to read twice just to keep up with your thought process, ya know?
Anyways, despite what I say, I really liked this.
-Silence, courtesy of The Roadhouse.
| Nina Kindred chapter 1 . 6/26/2008
I love this! I'm so glad you checked out my work. I check out everyone that posts on my stuff. I can't wait to read more. Of course Russia, Russians, and angry women are three of my favorite things.
| FairlyOddGirl16 chapter 1 . 6/20/2008
oh my god. that was amazing. you're an excellent writer. these stories are so addicting. im on my way to read your other one now. i hope you write more!
| MidnightFlight chapter 1 . 6/18/2008
wow. you are an amazing writer. plez write more! these two stories about Katja completely captivated me! they're amazing! Can't wait for more!