Reviews for The Break Up
Engineer of Words chapter 1 . 11/27/2008
You know, I wish I could find something to critique, but I can't. Nice work.

I really enjoyed reading this, especially in part to no lack of well-written violence. And the irony at the end is just icing on the cake.
Aiko-Moon chapter 1 . 9/23/2008
This isn't really my thing, the whole assasin like stuff. But you did a good job on it. i was surprised that I was able to read through the whole thing. Normally if it doesn't interest me then I stop reading. But this was very well writen. So good job. :)
FrameJock chapter 1 . 9/12/2008
"Hell hath no fury..."

Jeez and wow.

Well written, crisp and smooth. Katja's pain is very real and compelling. Can't wait to see more of this lovely lady.
Caecilia chapter 1 . 8/15/2008
I love your descriptions. Especially in the whole Eddie being shot repeatedly scene. It's so vivid.

I love Katja's stories. She's definitely an interesting character. I really love the dark humor that is throughout this story. I'm a sucker for a piece of dark humor.

Amazing stuff you have, Zerom. I'm addicted. Now I have to go read more...

~~Caecilia.
Mrstress chapter 1 . 8/13/2008
This story was just as good as the last one, and I thank you for that.

I also want to thank you for not calling a surpressor a silencer... It's the little things that matter, ha ha.
Thoughtful Silence chapter 1 . 7/19/2008
Alrighty, first off... I love the sardonic, kinda dark humour that laces this. It was a nice piece, with a little romance, a little tears and then a little Mk. 23. The way you integrate little details of the characters throughout the story was a nice touch, even though it seemed a bit... excessive at times (I.E. when Katja was leaving the hotel and you detailed her entire attire).

The thing about this is... even though he's a complete bastard, I prefer Eddie in this story. Katja is too, I don't know, bipolar in personality? One minute tears, and thinking 'bout taking him back (despite said cheating, thieving and general attempted murdering) next first-class killer... Though I did like how that added an inherent 'human side' to her. She's not one of these 'cold' assassins that are all too frequent.

I liked the ending, but I didn't like it... if only because I have NEVER heard the saying "break-ups can be murder on an individual". I would take out everything on that line 'cept for 'break-ups can be murder' just to cement the effect of the... I wanna say cheesiness?

Another thing 'bout this, I found, was that some of the sentences were really long, with an abundance of adjectives, adverbs and nouns invariably mixed in with every punctuation mark, except for a full-stop. Don't get me wrong, they are good, descriptive sentences (which are what most stories lack) but some lines I had to read twice just to keep up with your thought process, ya know?

Anyways, despite what I say, I really liked this.

-Silence, courtesy of The Roadhouse.
Nina Kindred chapter 1 . 6/26/2008
I love this! I'm so glad you checked out my work. I check out everyone that posts on my stuff. I can't wait to read more. Of course Russia, Russians, and angry women are three of my favorite things.
FairlyOddGirl16 chapter 1 . 6/20/2008
oh my god. that was amazing. you're an excellent writer. these stories are so addicting. im on my way to read your other one now. i hope you write more!
MidnightFlight chapter 1 . 6/18/2008
wow. you are an amazing writer. plez write more! these two stories about Katja completely captivated me! they're amazing! Can't wait for more!