nice "character chapter". Definitely got the idea of Dexter's character which is awesome. I hate characters with no depth. I can't wait to read more about Sarah. I have a feeling she's not exactly ok after that bite...

Sounds suspicious. _- But I guess if someone saved my life, I wouldn't care how suspicious they sounded. And even if Juliette isn't curious about the package, I am! I really want to know what's going on with Larisa. My theory is that she's trying to take over the world...Oh! And I hope we get to learn more about the past, that would be cool!

wow, she's going to tell her the truth? or something close to the truth? I like how Juliette has no idea what she's getting into, it makes this story really interesting.

Again, most cops are idiots. That being said, I'm so intrigued now by what's going on! I want to read more to understand it better, but I'm afraid I'll have to wait tomorrow when I'm more awake! But any story that makes me want to stay up way past my ability to function is a good story indeed, so bravo!

wow, another intense chapter! I'm practically on the edge of my seat waiting to see what happens. I'll admit, I don't know much about rugby, but you made it to where I didn't really have to understand the characters, which was nice. ANd the police response was so predictable. THey're so worried about giving people tickets that they actually forget that they're main job should be helping people! Sorry for the rant, I just like your portrayal of the police officer in this chapter. _

wow this first chapter is pretty intense, but it definitely has me hooked!

I'll be honest. The math stuff made no sense whatsoever to me but besides that, the rest of the chapter was very very interesting. I wonder how they all tie together? Awesome! I can't wait for the next one.

Awesome! Another great chapter! I can't wait for the next one! ;)

~nic~

No more! what? Um, more chapters please! :)

I have to know what happens!

~nicola

ps: If you don't mind, i would really like to advertise this on my page sos all of the few people who actually stumble across my profile will read your story of awesomeness! That cool?

My gosh, (sob) I am so hooked. I'm addicted!

~nicola~

O.M.G. (excuse my blasphamy) Thats all I can say (or type,) Your story grabbed me from the begining, hooked claws into me and held me until the end. It was one of the best stories (or chapters in this case 'cause i haven't read the whole thing) I have ever read on this site.

onward to chapter 2,

-nicola

I like this story, just edit it a little bit (for example, you put something in there about someone turning a doorbell, I think you meant doornob.) Other than a few minor errors, this is pretty impressive! I can't wait to read more.