Reviews for Away With Jenny Wren
Alteng chapter 8 . 9/27/2008
Okay, I'm caught up again.

Jenny reminds me of Misa from Desath Note. She's a little goth girl, who wears really short skirts and the like. That was just the imagae I got of Jenny, what can I say.

I can't say that I would be disappointed if Luca burns down Liam's house and with him in it as well. That would finish the list, now wouldn't it?

I kind of look for little Nameless puppy to get squashed somewhere along the lines, but I am mean like that. It is best to be mean to fictional characters. I guess that is why my dogs love me.

When Jenny is talking about her mom's death, I was proud of Luca for knowing that she is lying. It is so natural for her. It makes me wonder why he continues to like her. Maybe they are more alike than he thinks.

If what Luca says about Sandy is true and not his paranoia, then she deserves to have the singing and dancing act. It would be odd if this is all part of his delusion.

You know, if Liam's house burns down, Morgan is likely to put two and two together and figure that Luca did it, because he did skip school that day.

Anyway, I don't really find this story boring. It seems to move along well.
Written chapter 8 . 9/27/2008
oh. oh.


I don't know what to say. I'm so frightened by that polaroid and I dont know how sane our narrator really is and I ... did he do it? I dont think he did, but it's possible, you know. either way, he's in trouble, I'd think.

and Mikey... did he love Liam? Or was he just gay and Liam was homophobic?

Its 4 am and I am too disturbed (not by your story but by lack of sleep) to say much else. I mean, you probably didn't intend it to be that frightening, but I really am frightened.



haha. I mean...
Alteng chapter 7 . 9/27/2008
Okay, as I said in the last review, this makes a lot more sense having read the previous chapter.

Here's a little tittly question, but if Luca is skipping school, why is Jenny home as well? Is she cutting class as well or is it so late that everyone is back home?

Yes, Jenny is a hard one to follow because she lies so much. Reminds me of a couple of my co-workers. I have one fellow who is telling me that he has asthma, lung cancer, and has only half of a lung. I think every time he talks to us, he adds another fatal illness on there. Bernadette does the same thing. It makes for a fun night at work. I do like fiction.

Anyway, it is interesting in seeing the contrast between Kim and Ian. I wonder if there is nothing they can do for Tor. They do seem like loving foster parents. It's a shame.

The dream at the end is a bit odd, but it does show how terribly haunted Luca is by Mikey's death, although he says otherwise.

I wonder if Swallow can be trusted. After all, Jenny seems to lie all the time. I do notice that the FAE seems to have a bird fetish for names. Is this something with wanting to fly away?
Alteng chapter 6 . 9/27/2008
Okay, it makes more sense when I read Chapter 6 before Chapter 7. It has been too long. I forgot what chapter I left off on.

The only complaint I can see with this is I don't really think that Luca would need three joints to get that high. Maybe Tor had three of them compared to his one. She does seem more out there than he does. This is unless you are trying to say that he has done this often. Of course, I could be totally wrong. I have never done weed before either. I couldn't even handle cigarettes.

The commune thing is interesting. I guess that could explain a lot of Jenny's oddness and friends and beliefs. She does seem rather cool about the whole thing, and I can just see Luca wanting to rub up her legs.

I also like Tor's tack. Bang on the door and announce that she has to take a piss was a good one, but she does seem loving in her own way. It is weird.
Georgianna chapter 6 . 9/26/2008
I have no idea what is happening, yet I adore this story.
criti-sized chapter 7 . 9/26/2008
I've been trying to catch up on everything for some time now, lol, and finally am able to get on the computer to review.

[“He’s having a baby,” she grunts hatefully.] Lol, I'm guessing that 'he' is probably Mr. Mystery that you mentioned.

[“Life’s a bitch. But he’ll be single soon, Victoria.”] I don't know if I could be around such honestly happy people. They would drive me crazy.

[I think of my birthday tomorrow and wonder what it’ll be like without Mikey. I think of my mother. I’m thinking too much.] Yeah, he definitely is.

[I’m confused. Didn’t she say that he wanted to have kids with her? Polyandry and incest—who are these people?] Lol. That makes a point, but not to Tor.

[“I’m going to go see Jase,” Tor announces, turning left by the traffic lights. “I don’t want to be around when Mount Kimberly blows her top. Be a darling and don’t blame me, yeah? Say I found you melting on some street corner like that and was just looking after you or something.”] Not an older sister, but her words are spoken like one.

[ I know I can’t trust her, but I want to.] In the world of those you can trust, you turn to the one that you can't... Something my grandmother used to say, but she's crazy, lol.

[His black suit is absolutely spotless and I don’t understand.] What an impression to get, lol.

Great chapter. The differet scenes and thoughts, people in this chapter gave it the image of being twisted just a much as the plot. Poo Luca seems to get more and more confused as he goes on, and his memories, or images are interesting.

Meve chapter 1 . 9/24/2008
writ suggested this to me, so natch, I had to read it. gorgeous work. shame that you don't have more reviews.
Written chapter 7 . 9/24/2008
godd this story is amazing to me right now. I don't know what it is, but I'm like, in love with it.

that sounds creepy.

I wonder if Luca should be taking his mother's advice and running far, far away. I don't think jenny wanted him to meet swallow either. hm. I don't know. confused but I can't wait till you update again!
Written chapter 6 . 9/24/2008
wow, wonderful and trippy. Tor is an interesting character... and I find the things Luca says so fascinating. like his hallucinations. I hallucinate before I fall asleep and things like that, but never in the middle of the day like that.

this story has a haunting quality to it. for some reason.
Written chapter 5 . 9/24/2008
I suppose this would be a good time to tell you that I haven't been reviewing each chapter because I've been breathlessly rushing off to the next one. I wasn't going to review here either, but then I thought I should pause and let you know what I think.

first of all, wow. I love his "voice" or whatever. the style youre writing him in is amazing. fantastic use of the present tense as well. its not jarring, with you it never is, and you just flesh out lovely little things and wow I'm making no sense I'd best stop.

i loved chapter two, where we see his mother, but for some reason I can't think of anything else to say about that. it's a little funny in a black humor sort of way, how she is so crazy, but it's heart breaking too. the part where she told him to run away when he meets "him" gave me the chills.

something about the narration makes it seem like he's an unreliable narrator. I mean, he seems a little off his rocker on occasion, so its hard to tell if he's the crazy one or if, for example, morgan is wrong about the handwriting thing. I mean, did Liam fake his handwriting?

liam sounds like such a psycho. I wonder what he did that made luca's friend kill himself. HMM.

jenny wren is an amazing character. she has this PRESENCE. it's "awesome" in the literal sense, and I can feel her, if that makes sense. I have so many questions about who she is and what is up with that pregnancy thing, but I suppose it will have to wait.

one of my favorite descriptions, from god knows which chapter, was where his heart is squeezed into the shape of an hour glass.

or something. you know what I'm referring to.

also want to see more about his singing.

UHM. okay that's all for now. do forgive me for not giving you my thoughts up till ch. 5. I just couldn't stop reading!
Written chapter 1 . 9/23/2008
wow. this blew me away, yeah? love how real and sad and yet not really and so good it is. I dont know if I'm talking any sense right now but its bed time. ugh. two exams next week and I've got so much to do! love how he looks for a kindred spirit in sandy but doesn't find it... I mean, I dont love it, but you know? it seems very true.

I just really, really like it. wow.
Dot Cubed chapter 1 . 9/23/2008
This is so incredible! Like I have no words for how much I love it. I'm such a sucker for the present tense, and you use it so perfectly in this. And I absolutely love Luca so much, and his amazing little super power thing, and I feel so bad for him at the same time because of Mikey!

I just love the way you reveal little details, too, except not (like about Liam)-because Luca knows what they are so he doesn't need to explain them.

And I really really love the last line. I honestly have no words.
Unknowning chapter 7 . 9/22/2008
Awesome chapter. The main character is so bitter but I can't help but relate to him somehow. Update soon!
Tsumujikaze no Soujutsu chapter 7 . 9/20/2008
Wow, I really wonder if this story is really nutcase-centred lol! XD Anyway, I think it's interesting to see who or what Luca is in this story. I do think there's some implications on Swallow's words. And I really wonder how he got to know Luca's mom. For some weird reason though, I do feel the different scenes here feel a bit random to me. Well, I guess maybe it's because I'm messed up in the brain after seeing Boro put up a stupid sub-standard performance against Sunderland at away. They really deserved the 2-0 loss. Nothing to say. :( Anyway, for some funny reason, the part on Luca's relationship with Liam and how Mikey killed himself seems to give me some weird inspiration for The Elven Chronicles plot lol! :D And yeah, I think my brain is still messed up after the stupid Sunderland-Boro match. If not, then I might have seen a bit on the twists you've said in your AN. :S Anyway, I'm writing on a new chapter of Elven Chronicles at this moment. Just look out for it soon. I finished the prologue chapter of Seal of Valor in one shot partially due to my screwed up frustrations at Boro's loss against Portsmouth last week. I might do the same tonight. So maybe I can really finished it by tonight. Plus I really wanted to let my Warhammer 7th ed codex finished downloading by tonight if possible.
criti-sized chapter 6 . 9/13/2008
Alright, here I finally am. It's taken me forever to catch up on my reviewing, lol.

[I am a creature of habit.] Lol, a lot of people are.

[It’s weird; since Mikey died, every time I look at Tor I see her drowning.] That is weird.

[Jase is Tor’s nerd boyfriend. Unfortunately, he is right about most things.] Lol, imagine a person as spiteful as her having a nerdy boyfriend.

[I say nothing, but I try to nod and act like I’m interested.] I tend to do that to my brother, act like I'm listening to him... Then he catches on, lol.

[1. Skip school

2. Kill

3. Burn a house down

4. Sam’s money: £5

5. Fight a teacher] Well, he's practically done number one already.


“And you will all be so incredibly angsty and emo, right?”] Lol, I think that'll make a good band.

[I hate her. And she’s not even my fake big sister; I’m two months older than her.] Haha, that's a surprise, she came off as though she were older than him.

Cool chapter. I liked the interaction in it, but that's probably no surprise, lol. Poor Luca, I think this chapter makes him seem more lost than any of the other chapters did. And the weed bit, genius, lol.

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