|Reviews for Away With Jenny Wren|
| Tsumujikaze no Soujutsu chapter 22 . 8/26/2009
Well, actually I planned to review this after updating The Eternal Grail, but I can't bloody wait lol! XD Anyway, interesting stuff on Mikey here. The past flashback was especially emotionally strong in impact here. I really think Luca's relationship with Mikey was rather confusing. It's either that or I'm thinking too much. :S Also, I can say that this chapter really has a great impact on the plot itself. It's not so much on the developments, but rather the impact is within the readers' minds. And is it just me or is Luca really a bisexual? As for the end where Mikey goes on about Jenny Wren, well it seems that things might be coming to a climax given that you've only have seven chapters left. Which kind of sucks because this one's a good story. That is unless you choose to continue your fantasy fic lol! :D I think the title is Peace, right? ;)
| Alteng chapter 22 . 8/24/2009
This follows along well. I do have to agree with Luca that I find the love/hate relationship between Liam and Mikey a bit confusing.
I am still looking for Luca to have the proper falshback that he actually shot Mikey instead of it being a suicide.
The ending of the chapter seems to give Luca some normal emotions on the situation, or at least what is expected to be normal in that he is confused by the recent events.
It does seem odd that the police are still investigating the scene. It seems like this story takes place over a 6 month or more period. It also seems odd that Ian would want to talk with Luca about it still after such a long time.
Oh well, I am surprised that you can still get so many more chapters out of this story, but I am looking forward to it all drawing together.
| Danielle Gin chapter 3 . 8/17/2009
Again, I am still enjoying this story! In this chapter you handled Luca's emotions particularly well, especially when he was talking to Jenny in the last scene. And on Jenny's note: is she a fairy? I'm trying to think ahead from what I've read on the story's summary, so I'm probably completely off. Her character though, is interesting. She appears to have a good background story, though not much of it's known yet, and her mannerisms are deffinetely a little strange, in a cute way.
Man, I can hardly wait until I have more time to continue reading! This is such a creative story!
| 25ariel25 chapter 21 . 8/14/2009
Swallow is strangely more disturbing when he's being nice
| Danielle Gin chapter 2 . 8/14/2009
This was such a good chapter! You were able to find a happy medium between almost funny sarcasm and Luca's sadness - while still letting your words and descriptions pack a punch. Character wise, I feel like I'm starting to know Luca a lot more now - and I like him a lot. I adore that he's not the typical guy, that he's gone through this tragedy with Mike and what's happening with his mother (which her scene was done beautifully, by the way - both emotional and curious). The plot is something I'm getting very excited about, which probably sounds odd after this sad chapter. But now that I know who Luca really is, I'm ready to get the plot ball rolling!
Golly, I can't wait to read more! Great work so far! It really is fantastic!
| Tsumujikaze no Soujutsu chapter 21 . 8/4/2009
To be honest Katie is actually a refreshing change from all the kid roles I've seen so far. As far I know, at least she doesn't go wtf at the dirty talk. And I don't know why, but I feel that if Katie is older, she could have walked down the aisle with Swallow. Yes. Me and my sick mind. :S And what I've suspected has gone true here it seems. Liam got offed by Swallow in a certain wtf manner. Anyway, glad to see a humane side of Swallow. I did more or less suspect it, but you really did well to make it known here. :) As for the ending on the note, I wonder who would be so horrendous to frame Luca and instigating Swallow in a puppet like way. Guess there's a bigger antagonist than Swallow here. Wonder who will that be.
P.S: I don't know if you've put me in your author alert, but The Eternal Grail is up with a new chapter. Or rather it's just a joke interlude having nothing to do with the plot in any way or form. Go ahead and read it. And give me a review on it. Just don't be serious about it because it's just something super random in nature albeit the humor there was really crude. And for your info, I included some of my reviewers in it and you're counted in as well albeit your role in it was only done in a mentioned status. But yeah, I did try my best to make you awesome via a certain video game character. :D
| Alteng chapter 21 . 8/3/2009
Well, I have a lot of thoughts about Swallow. In the conversation, he seems to be downright friendly, but he's still a creepy bit. If I was Luca, I still wouldn't trust him as far as I could comfortably kick him. He seems to be a ruthless bit in killing Darren. Of course, I am not sure if Darren's death would be more of in self defense. After all, he has made an attempt on Swallow's life already,
The thing with Liam seems a bit vicious, becasuze Liam is still a silly high school kid. He might have needed his ass kicked, but he doesn't really deserve to die. So, killing him seems kind of a childish thing that gets Luca to trust and maybe like Swallow a bit more, but it still puts the boy on the alert.
I would say that you are implying that Swallow wrote the note. I didn't realise that the analysis came back on that and Luca was proved to have written it. I would have thought that would have gotten him in more trouble with the school, instead of him being allowed to come back.
The relationship between Katie and Luca is interesting. I would have thought that he would want to keep Katie away from the FAE as much as possible instead of getting her involved in this mess.
I am still enjoying the story though. It seems to be finally drawing together.
| sherbetsi chapter 21 . 8/2/2009
This story is so unbelieveably modern Irish. I dont know why I havent noticed it before. I'm from Northern Ireland and I am fully loving the multiple references to Guinness. Drink of the nation you know.
Great to get another chapter from you. Swallow comes across as more open in this chapter. He's acting the friend and confidant. They seem closer because Swallow is enforcing the similarities and the things they have in common to make himself seem gain Luca's trust a little more. He wants something from Luca but he seems like a better person that he has been conveyed as in previous chapters.
| inkspatters chapter 21 . 7/31/2009
There's just something so amazing about the way you write, it's so...real? I don't know. I do know that I loved this chapter and that your characterisation is, as always brilliant. I really liked seeing that different side to Swallow, and it was cool that even though Luca sorta liked him he couldn't really let his guard down. That seems like something Luca would do.
Also, I didn't find it confusing, since I remembered the previous chapters (I have a memory like a goldfish, so that means your story's pretty memorable).
| Danielle Gin chapter 1 . 7/31/2009
Wow! This was such a neat chapter! It's starting the story off really well, too. And your main character, Luca, is so interesting! His both a little mysterious and sarcastic, but he has this fantastic edge to him! I adore it.
I'll definitely be reading more. It's completely clear now why this is a SKoW nominee. Great work!
| Alteng chapter 20 . 7/31/2009
I think that Swallow and Luca have some serious Oedipal Complexes, and maybe in a more complete way. After all, Swallow does seem to want to kill his father. And now, so does Luca. Of course, Luca has the crush on Jenny, who reminded him of the woman that he thought was his mother. That gets to be some strange, twisted thoughts there.
Actually, I feel sorry for McKenzie. He seems to be a bit witless of the wrong doing or maybe that Luca's birth would kill his wife.
Somehow I am not surprised that McKenzie is Luca's father, but you might have mentioned that in the previous chapter. I remembered most of your characters despite the delay. So, that says something about your writing.
| Tsumujikaze no Soujutsu chapter 20 . 7/20/2009
Man, revelation tons ahead here. That was some shocking truth McKenzie said here. The whole wtf definition has never gotten more real in this story here. And I'm not sure if I've said this before, but it seems that at least almost every character here got his own banged up head here. :S Anyway, I do see a good potential for plot development given the major whammy of the whole truth. And can virus really cause cancer? Isn't cancer caused by some kind of cells screw up? I'm getting confused here. :S Anyway, my brain has gone dead now, so I think I'll stop here. I'm truly sorry for this crappy lack of depth review. I know that I could and should have done better. :(
| Written chapter 20 . 7/18/2009
love how the story is really coming together. this one had me at the edge of my seat, and since it's been a while, it took me some time to really figure out what had happened. but I think I have it all clear in my head...
the only thing I'm wondering about now is what luca's next move will be.
I mean, jenny seems to think that he won't seek revenge, but from his thoughts, it seems like he's planning something pretty bad.
as usual, there are some great lines in this chapter. your writing is understated but so good! and luca is so... crazy.
I'm actually on vacation and I don't have much time online, or else I would say more, but yeah. this was a good reveal, I think. I'm glad to finally see it coming together, you know?
| sherbetsi chapter 20 . 7/14/2009
Fucking amazing as always. Get this next one out pronto, right? XP
| Reda chapter 3 . 6/29/2009
I knew I needed to read this. It's hard to stop here but I have to get sleep. Your writing is so realistically personal; your characters so intriguing and alive. Kind of like you grab hold and don't let go. Something I wish I could do better, that's for sure. Can't say much more than that. Praise and more praise because even though it's not the fantasy I live and love - it's something I enjoy all the same.