fascinating stuff

i really liked the biology stuff... very, very fascinating!

Oh god the ending was so weird... I actually liked this chapter though. Swallow is twisted. Is Curlew a bird-name or something?

Ten hours? The art exam is ten hours? Wow, GCSE's sound creepy.

I can see five pounds vividly through closed eyelids,

um, how can five pounds be thrown at someone? *confused* oh god luca really loves the art cupboard doesn't he?

Wow, Mikey’s death has castrated me.

lol

i just had this random thought... i didn't like the names at the beginning - like jenny, say - because they were so ordinary but now i really think they fit. because they're so well, not ordinary. not the names, you know, the people :)

what was the genre before? cookies to you, although you've probably received dozens by now!

the last bit is confusing but the marie part was really well-written... i wonder what morgan thinks though.

this is fascinating, truly fascinating. the plot is like... well, you must have spent a lot of time working on it! it's very, very engrossing.

“Everyone has reasons,” she says. “There are millions and millions of reasons all over the place, more reasons than anyone could ever deal with. I have reasons too, but I don’t hit people. I hate to say this, Luca, but he probably has his reasons too. Dark, twisted reasons that strangle his mind like liquorice laces.”

this was my favorite line.. it's so deep.

this is just such a beautiful story... i've only read two chapters but it's really touched me. the feel of it - i don't know if i'm making myself clear - is just... wow. wonderful. it's really really very lovely.

Luca is getting creepier. He's so shady with all the obsessing about Mike and Liam. What went on there? Anyway I love this story.

Ariel

Well it seems that things are gonna speed up pace wise in this story very soon. And sad to know that this story's ending. :( Anyway, I really wonder who that Darren McKenzie is and what he did to cause Swallow to hate him. And Swallow reminds me of Sephiroth in Final Fantasy 7 for that hate everyone else kind of mentality. He's definitely nuts. What can be interesting though is what pushed him over the edge.

And Jay has confirmed to go loco here. If he's not nuts, then I don't know what's your standards for that state of mind. Wonder what he's gonna do with his kid though. It seems that he's capable of doing random shit with that tot. And I think I might havce missed something, but why Jay said to Luca welcome to the family?

And I'm not too sure about this, but do you intend the Sam part to be a filler? And yeah, DM. Does that stands for Darren McKenzie? Wonder what shit has he created in this story. Will be interesting to find out. :)

This is not exactly a filler in that Luca finds something out about Darren McKenzie, or at least it is a start for a direction.

It is funny how Luca thinks that everything centers around him. It has to be either Liam or Swallow to beat up Sam. It couldn't be a random mugger. Neither of them are thinking clearer enough to think that a person may not see an attacker if the attacker hit him from behind. No eyes in the back of the head.

Jay is a peculiar little fellow. I take it that he is leaving his baby in another's nest. How odd.

Thanks for reading Bane. You didn't sign the review, so I couldn't respond. I'm glad you are enjoying the story. I have managed to squeeze out about a page of the next chapter. Writer's block is hell.

I more and more get the feeling that liam didn't REALLY do anything. so who did knock out sam then? I want to rule out our protagonist... but one can never really be too sure. but it was probably swallow, right?

and did jay's baby REALLY get switched? or is it more of a psychological fear? I wonder. It was interesting, this scene with Jay. It doesn't seem like Luca would ever actually confide in Jay, but maybe he should... I guess it just sucks to keep everything all bottled up like he's doing.

DM must be Darren McKenzie... which means that things are starting to clear up! this chapter didn't seem like filler to me, though it is setting up for what seems to be the end.

So... I don't really know WHY swallow wants darren... am I just thick?

Man, if my arm wasn't killing me I would've been all over this chapter, lol. I really liked the intensity of this chapter for some reason, and Luca's train of thoughts as usual was very interesting.

Sparrow still playign the bigger brother part is funny, especially since for some reason he likes to actually taunt Luca.

But let me go take this pain killer, lol. Awesome chapter.

C.S.