Reviews for Away With Jenny Wren
25ariel25 chapter 16 . 2/3/2009
Yay for updates.

I liked how in this chapter you kind of have a lot of Luca talking to himself in between the lines of what he's actually saying.

I'm not sure what the "worst line" is haha. There was some awkward dialog but luca's an awkward person. It fits. I honestly liked this chapter a lot.
entricate chapter 15 . 1/23/2009
I liked this chapter a lot! :D I'm not sure if I'm disappointed or not that Luca rejected Jenny. xD But I think they should get together. -nod- Great chapter!
Tsumujikaze no Soujutsu chapter 15 . 1/22/2009
Well, I really wonder about Luca's past with Mikey. tbh for me it's to sketchy to form a choherent picture, but I guess that's what you want. ;) And yeah, I've said this before and I'll say it again: Luca is nuts lol! :D And the porno comments really makes me go lol especially the part on sex. It really did a lot on Luca's humor score lawl. XD With that being said though, I really wonder if Luca's age was legit for watching porn. As far as I know, it's for those eighteen and above or in some countries, twenty one and above. Well, you know, standard knowledge on legit porn watching age even without watching it yourself. :D Anyway, wonder how the whole story will play out especially with a part two coming out. On a side note, the movie I'm wanting to watch is also a two parter with the first part being watched already. Anyway, interesting chapter here especially with Ian's talk and Jenny's metting with Luca's mom. Wonder how this will tie into the plot. :) And yeah, I've done a new chapter of A Raner's Tale now and I'll most likely have that up within a few days. Wait for the bomb will ya? ;)
Written chapter 15 . 1/21/2009
oh gosh. jenny wren.

that's really all I have to say!

I know I always say this but I WANT TO KNOW WHAT'S HAPPENINGG.

haha. as always, amazing chapter. I really overuse the word "gorgeous" when reviewing you. apologies. this chapter did not disappoint.

each new chapter seems to bring up new questions though.

jenny and swallow are sort of heeby.
criti-sized chapter 15 . 1/20/2009
I'm back!

[“What the Hell are you on?” asks my charming foster sister, who is currently drowning in her orange juice.] Lol, I'd feel the same way if I was his family, uncertain what was wrong with him.

[“And I wasn’t even stealing that baby. It was a friend’s. I was walking it.”] Aha, that's a thought, walking gets and taking the dogs out to the park.

[Promises mean nothing. Mikey promised me he wouldn’t let Liam get to him, and look what happened.] That they don't. Such a shame though.

Wow,this chapter was something else. Makes me wonder if Jenny was actually sleeping with Swallow. And her visit to his mother... Hmm, I'm at a loss for words, but that could be because I'm running on three hours of sleep and am too stupid to lay back down, lol.

Great chapter.

criti-sized chapter 14 . 1/20/2009
Wow, I'm so far behind, lol. I know exactly the way that you feel.

[She likes him. Well, until she gets confused and sees ‘Him’ again, until he makes bad things happen to her. Brilliant.] Something about LUca's trend of thought is funny and awesome. To be able to think of it like it is, it hilarious.

[“Oh,” says Mother, beaming. “That’s a lovely thing to say, Luca.”] Holy shitake mushrooms, she said his name... Is that Swallow's help?

[My mother continues to smile goofily, then gestures at me with one finger. “Let me tell you a story,” she begins. “A love story. About your father. He was called...Stuart.”

Oh God.] I'd feel the same way.

[“Anyway, of all the people to interview, he chose Swallow. Stupid; Swallow isn’t like most of us.”] Lol, that's all too obvious.

[Swallow shakes his head. “You’re wrong,” he whispers mockingly.] Oh boy, now the truth is reveal vaguely, lol.

[“Talk?” I pant. How can he want to talk? I want to kick seven different shades of shit out of his face, and I’m the peaceful healer.] This had me laughing. Imagine kicking seven different shades out of someone. If I could do that I would.

Interesting background and tale of how hey are the way that they are. I liked reading it from Swallow's point of view, crazy ass, lol.

Great chapter.

Alteng chapter 15 . 1/20/2009
Hey, you are no further behind than I am, and I am going through a nasty bout with writer's block to boot.

The thing that stands out the most in this chapter is Ian's worry about Luca finding some member of his family. That was weird. He got all defensive about that one. It makes me wonder what does he know, and what's he trying to hide?

Jenny's such a lousy liar. We all know what she's been up to, and she does have the tendency of lying a lot anyway. I guess this doesn't make Luca all that special on her list.

And for all of Luca's denial of jealousy, I think he is a touch jealous when she asks him to date her officially. He just can't get the idea of communial woman out his mind nor the thing with Swallow. Yep, he is jealous.

I do wonder what she really said to Luca's mom. That could be a freaky thing if she said something about Luca is her boyfriend or something of the sort, and Mother still thinks he's a girl. This would have to confuse her even more.
Kate Marshall chapter 15 . 1/19/2009
No wonder Luca is screwed up. Now he's got Jenny Wren to fret over. *rolls eyes* And um, ew. Incest. (Okay, not /really/, but I'm rooting for Luca here, so yeah. xD)

Thank you for updating and good luck with the next chapter! _
25ariel25 chapter 15 . 1/19/2009
I've gotta say Jenny sort of disturbs me in a way. Her and Luca are two of the most messed up characters I may have ever read about on fictionpress. I love this story. It's so unique. Update soon!
e chapter 15 . 1/19/2009
I don't know if I'm disappointed or not that Luca turned Jenny down. xD

Well, this was a really great chapter! I liked it! Can't wait for the next one! :3
entricate chapter 14 . 1/14/2009
Well, finally we learn more about the FAE! :D

This story was just amazing. I can't really express how much I liked it. You described Luca's point of view - the strange way he sees things - beautifully, and the characters are extremely strange in an amazing way. I can't really describe how I feel exactly about this story. xD Just know that it's awesome. -nods- Yeah.

I look forward to any new chapters!
dyingimmortal chapter 14 . 1/12/2009
This story was absolutely brilliant! :) I seriously can't convey how much I liked it (even though I didn't understand it half the time... probably because I'm just slow on the uptake; oh well); it was beautifully written, and the way you describe Luca's, er, abnormality was just... awesome. Seriously. This story's amazing. 8D Terrific job~!
Kate Marshall chapter 14 . 1/11/2009
And so the grand mystery of the FAE is revealed.


And Swallow's a lunatic. In fact, /everyone/ in this story is a lunatic. Jenny, Mikey, Liam, Swallow, Luca, Luca's mom, ect.

Oh yeah, and how the heck did Luca's mom know his name? Weird.

Thanks for updating and good luck with the next chapter! _
ideallylonely chapter 14 . 1/11/2009
yeh, it is bad to update late. Cos people will forget many characters... like i have. -_-""
Dot Cubed chapter 7 . 1/10/2009
hi again! i'm sorry i suck at reviewing, haha

“He’s having a baby,” -okay, so at first i thought the guy was having the baby. like he was the one who was actually pregnant. i am pretty sure that's not right, though.

dude, he'll be single soon! that's so ominous! luca's thoughts are mirroring my own.

"maybe she has a thing about the tenth letter of the alphabet. That would be weird." -hahaha, oh luca.

"Didn’t she say that he wanted to have kids with her? Polyandry and incest—who are these people?" -that is really kind of weird. like, really weird. then again isn't jenny an alien or something? it does not make me love her less, but it is something to be considered.

"Thank. God." -HAHAHAHAHAHA i did not think it was possible for me to love luca any more than i already do, but this line kind of made me love him more.

"I’m scared shitless of the future." -ME TOO, LUCA.

“Never come back here again.” -what is up with everything being so ominous? it's creepy!

"Say I found you melting on some street corner like that and was just looking after you or something.” -hee, i love tor!




oh hi mikey!

oh, this is a flashback! i thought it was mikey appearing in ghost form again, but i guess not.

"I can’t see this." -D: that makes me kind of upset

is this psycho loser ghost man? okay, he can't be a loser is he helped luca, and maybe he's not a psycho either, but i still think he's ghost man.

“My name’s Swallow,” -swallow! i've decided i like swallow, cause he helped luca out and it does not look like he broke a sweat.

"I make a note to never get on the wrong side of him." -because swallow's kind of badass.

“I hardly know her," -that doesn't mean you can't be in love with her, luca.

ah.h.h.h WAIT HE IS PSYCHO LOSER GHOST MAN! oh man, now i do not know how to feel about swallow. although he does have a name now. i'm so conflicted!

"We’re here because of you, Luca. Because of what we know you can do. We’re here to tell you the truth about the world and your place in it." -see, to me, that seems kind of creepy. i'd be like, how the hell do you people know about me go away, basically.

"hanging around somewhere stupid." -hahaha, that amuses me. and poor kimberly, she's trying so hard to be a good foster mom.

"I’m happier today than I’ve been in a long, long time." -aw luca i feel so bad for you! not that you're happy, just that it took this to make you happy, if that makes any sense

"Oh my God, she’s going to explain to me how sex works, isn’t she?" -hahahahaha

"It had taken months for me to learn not to cry when Ian came into the room, years for me to understand him." -that's so sad

"They definitely can’t be a real cult if they’re not on Wikipedia." -hahaha SO TRUE.

this scene like hurts! OPEN UP TO PEOPLE, LUCA. GEEZ.

oh man this is like the worst dream in the world.

"the exploding boy and me. Pink glitter dances in the hot air around me" -i kind of love that imagery.

geez luca is slowly going insane. not that he wasn't already kind of insane, but this is just sad.
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