Oh my goodness, poor Luca. That's so sad about his mom.

Huh. Magic singing abilities. ;D

can i just say that i have missed luca SO MUCH? because i have really missed him so much. i'm on break now so i'm finally going to get caught up with all the reviewing i need to do, and man, i need to do a lot of reviewing. you are an updating MACHINE.

"I am a creature of habit." -and that is kind of what I love about you, Luca.

"every time I look at Tor I see her drowning." -oh Luca, you have some major issues. at least loser ghost boy isn't around.

"They suck you in, eat your brain, and turn you into an empty person who just spouts out their beliefs all the time" -hee, I like Tor, just from that line.

"“Chirpy,” I add lamely." -ahahaha, that is definitely Jenny Wren! I MISS HER; she needs to show up soon mmkay?

"And I thought I saw" -LOSER PSYCHO GHOST FREAK. or maybe man. i totally can't remember what i nicknamed him. liam is still jerkface loserhead, though.

"And maybe I’m right there with her." -love you anyways, luca

Aw, I really like Tor. even if i don't approve of her birthday present; at least she's helping Luca!

"Liam is neither creative nor intelligent." -that's because he's a jerkface loserhead

“Batman and Robin and…a pirate. And we shall be awesome.” -AHAHAHA LUCA I LOVE YOU. and your band. YOU NEED AN AWESOME NAME

“When he shot himself." -geez, Tor is blunt.

"Shit; I amin bloody Wonderland." -oh luca. you are seriously going out of your mind. the whole bleeding tree thing is just a smidge creepy.

"love the F word so very much." -mee too! it's sort of an issue, actually

I want to see Jenny Wren too! It's been like two chapters, after all.

Ooh, who's the little girl? not gonna lie, i kinda like her already, hahaha

"People who stare too much are always fun, especially scary little kids." -i'm thinking i'm going to have to disagree with that one.

aw, I like Pigeon. despite her staring ways.

"I like her now." -hahaha

"I hate her. And she’s not even my fake big sister; I’m two months older than her." -AHAHAHAHAA

i actually just really love this entire exchange!

“You’re smiling, aren’t you, Luca Kelly?” -aw yay! see, jenny wren makes everything better

"It just sounded like ‘bleurgh’ to me, Luca. You just needed to say that you were stalking me and I would have been happy, you know?" -hahaha i love jenny wren. and luca. and jenny wren and luca together. they're amazing

hahahahaha i absolutely love jenny wren's rambling!

"I was a little kid I used to be scared of the Power Rangers." -i used to LOVE the power rangers! there's a part of me that still does, honestly. just not like the new kinds. old school power rangers are the way to go.

aw, i just love their interactions. even if they're both slightly screwed up in the head. it totally doesn't matter, though, because i will love luca with whatever he does. :)

Oh. Hot kiss.

I like this Jenny Wren. Interesting girl. Something very mysterious about her.

The second chapter is just as gripping as the first.

This story is fabulous. I liked it. I couldn't find any grammatical or spelling errors.

I like how you ended the chapter, because it leaves the reader wanting more. Good job.

i'm not sure how i feel about jenny wren... like if i should be creeped out by her or think she;s kind of cool in a weird way. but she certainly is an intresting character even tho she is a bit weird

I found the surrealistic part acceptable, given that Luca is working on an art project. The images all make sense with what were have been told and have experienced with the character.

I am surprised that Liam is so calm with Luca there in his room and having gone through his things and stinking up his room with the smoke stench. In a way, this kind of surreal as well, because of Swallow following him.

I amnot sure what I think of this chapter, because Luca is becoming unreliable as a source, because I believe he is suffering from dementia (all brought about by the note being in his handwriting). In a way, that does make the story more interesting and harder to write.

I know I am so far behind in reviewing this story and others that it's ridiculous, lol. But now that finals are over for me, I have some extra time on my hands.

So, this review will be from chapter 11.

[She folds her arms and looks freakily disappointed.] Lol, talk about bold. She should be in the room for all of the people that don't want to be there.

[My heart beats fast as Star cries out, sounding like an animal does just before someone stamps on its head to be kind.] Maybe I'm cruel, but the image of that made me laugh rather than feel anything else.

[His forced smile does nothing to cover up the fact that he’s bricking it.] I don't think any smile can cover the drama of child birth.

[“No!” Jay chokes, but Swallow has already started singing. He smiles.] Wow, that's rough.

[Lying is fun. I’m living out an episode of Eastenders.] Lol, besides fun it's addicting. I would know, I always lie to customers, lol.

[Ha ha. Unsurprisingly, this guy does not know my mother’s big mistake, and does not understand my terrible joke.] Yeah, lucky the guy doesn't know, lol.

[“I grew it in my cabbage patch, right next to the bullshit tree.”] That's the best place to grow it, lol.

Well, this chapter definitely had a lot of surprises in it. Not Star dying per se, but Luca taking the baby to the hospital.

On to 12.

[they found me five hours later under some old man’s hospital bed, sucking sweets I’d stolen from his bedside table.] Wow, not only did he hide in the man's room, but he stole his sweets, that sucks.

Another awesome chapter. I was so caught up in it hat I barely even put anything about it up in the review, lol.

The dream with Luca and Jenny was funny. She kinda comes off as th cooky girlfriend that comes to a persons house for the holidays and just ruins it, lol, but at the same tme makes it a great holiday.

And Kimberly's problem is that she's trying too hard to hold onto Luca, she's definitely going to end up losing him. Yeah, he's doing some weird things, but what teen doesn't?

And for 13, it's gonna be short, lol.

The chapter was really nice to me, I liked the exchange between Luca and Mikey, if it can be called Mikey, lol. The incident between Luca dn Swallow was new. When they talk it always seems to be about something that isn't goo, lol, and somehow Swallow seems to win the arguments.

Great chaps. I'll try and keep up this time.

C.S.

Wow amazing. Guess we've got a new psycho in the form of Liam in our hands now if what Swallow said is true lol! :D That being said, I used to thought Mikey's death was solely due to Liam. Guess I maybe wrong here. Maybe Luca's the real responsible and Mikey chose to haunt him because of this. I dunno. That being said though, Mikey just reminds me of some random creepy doppleganger of Luca here. And for some weird reason, I think Luca have the same song ability that Swallow had. Maybe even more powerful. Who knows? ;) That being said though, Swallow don't seems like a typical antagonist to me. At least he's here for Luca in this chapter. And bingo on the bullying mindset. I remember seeing a newspaper report saying the same thing as well. Well, all in all an interesting chapter. Hope to see this update soon! Bye! :)

I'm definitely lost at the end there. Were Liam and Mikey dating and does Luca actually have any idea what's going on? Liam seems a little less crazy than before. Luca seems twice as.

I can't really express the things I feel when I read your story. Not only it's original but it's also fantastically written. I love how every line sounds so poetic and yet it's all so tragic. I love the heavy issues of your characters and I'm dying to know what is going to happen and where it is all going and how everyone seems to be connected.

I seriously have no words to tell you what an amazing writer you are and what a fabulous world you have created. Please just keep on going, never stop writing, be sure I will be reading with great expectation.

Whoa this story is so trippy... I love it!

Can't wait for the next chapter! Keep up the good work

He killed someone didn't he? Oh my god, the suspense is killing me, haha. That was interesting though. Liam doesn't seem quite so bad anymore. I can't believe Luca burned himself and didn't notice! I did that to myself once, though, so I can't really talk, but not that badly.

I loved the reflective bit about the line between crazy and normal. Oh and have I mentioned how original the whole singing thing is? It's very awesome.

this story is just driving me INSANE haha. in the good way, but seriously, I wish I could read up to the end so I could see what was going on. I guess I have some questions.

a. is luca only feeling guilty because he didn't stop mikey from killing himself? or is there something more?

b. did liam try to poison him just now? or was that swallow? or was it just him freaking out?

c. did liam really write the list? I mean, he did, didn't he?

uhh... I'm just going to wait to see the next chapter before I try to figure this out haha. but I did enjoy reading this, despite all that. it was good to see some interaction with liam, as I want to know more about all that drama with him.

I must say, I hope nothing bad happens to katie. that would be sad, since she seems like such a sweet, well meaning kid :(

[I turn away, look up at the sky, and smell the storm that sits fat in the air.]

gorgeous line! great writing as always, and please oh please, update soon. I really want to know what happens! haha. way to draw out the suspense.

PS, dont worry about being late to read my chapters. we all get caught up with real life now and then :)

oh, and sorry this is short. finals week.