Reviews for Fun With Phobia
Moon Prynces chapter 1 . 10/6/2013
I love your story, and it was even more amazing what with all the requirements you had to follow to participate in that challenge. And I just had to tell you why I think this is so awesome and why I've read it twice already and will be adding it to my favs and– Okay, lemme get on with it cuz I talk too much sometimes.

First, there was your writing style and the point of view. Katie's character was pretty well-developed from what I read and I could see her as being an actual person and someone I might meet. Her point of view and way of describing things was amazing. It wasn't overly-descriptive of every little thing but it had a quirky way of talking about things that made you chuckle or smile or smirk. There was also just the dialogue in general, which was also totally realistic. I gotta say, it is actually ridiculously hard to find believable dialogue on this site half the time. Anyway, the writing style and character point of view were pretty original, genuine and just easy and fun to read. It makes me wish there was a longer story with this character, to see how she reacts to and describes other daily occurrences and situations.

The phobia was definitely weird and I was really skeptical about the whole thing at first. But then, I'm semi-glad you didn't go into any long-winded explanation as to how her phobia came about. It would have been too much and unnecessary. Of course, I can't help curiosity gnawing at me a bit. I mean, how does someone go through life with a phobia of stickers? There are stickers on items when you walk through any store to shop for things like toothpaste and pasta and– Just wow. Also, I loved how natural and real you made her phobia out to be – but not overdone, seeing as the story was in first person perspective. It was the part with Shane basically saving her from cruel, stickered middle-schoolers and she noticed she was crying and breathing harshly. You actually made me believe, holy crap, this poor girl! I guess I just see writers do things so over-dramatically that I can't believe any of this would happen in real life so I roll my eyes and either keep reading or give up. It's harder to relate to characters when they're portrayed in certain (ridiculous, unbelievable) ways, right?

Oh yeah, and Shane's character was adorable. He gave off some kind of laid-back, languid, surfer-dude vibe to me. When he glanced down to see he didn't have on his uniform and looked genuinely shocked...I found it hilarious. XD But that might also be because of the way you described his actions and attitude. I loved him from the moment you started spinning his character into creation – with Katie's depiction of him and the random details such as him shaving his head and eating crap food all the time but still being so "breathtakingly attractive".

Oh, and those kisses with Shane were amazing. Love how they weren't all thought-through by the characters and didn’t need any build-up. It just became a side effect of the situation and Katie's reaction to the situation. The first was cute and squeal-worthy. Because neither character was overanalyzing how much they like the other. It just seemed like an accepted fact that he liked her and he would've found an opportunity to make his move sooner or later. And the second was adorable and you brought back into play one of the requirements for the challenge, but it also confirmed that Katie totally liked him. And the third one was hot and steamy and just made me want to melt and wishing that I was in that position right now. Sigh.

There was definitely a perfect amount of ridiculous drama, humor and awesome story-telling because of the writing style. There were so many random, small details to love. One of my favorites was Brit-Brit and her friend – especially with her being a regular so that she and Katie now have some kind of ritual with greetings.

I think maybe there were a few errors but the only one that threw me off was, "Definitive Proof: God hates me." I'm pretty sure you used the colon incorrectly and in my head I'm still trying to figure out how to read that so it makes sense.

Your last line was perfect – hilarious and almost full-circle-ish (because I remember highlights being mentioned earlier in the story).

The story was awesome and you did a great job. I was disappointed to see you haven't written anything else! You should definitely give it a try again, or show us what you've already written but haven't uploaded yet. Anyway, thanks for the read!

xoxo
FeatherfooD chapter 1 . 1/1/2013
LOL this story was completely the right kind of ridiculous. And interracial couple for the win! ;)
F.H.W chapter 1 . 12/11/2012
This is so fluffy! i'm being suffocated here! Argh! But its super cute
Love it and like really super original. I've never met or even heard of a sticker phobia cool idea
theKnobblyKneedWriter chapter 1 . 6/6/2012
This. Is. Absolutely. Amazing.
CityBlackOut chapter 1 . 8/26/2011
This is great, with a good balance of traumatic moments and a simply light plot and characters. I also just like the fact that he's bald, not with longish or shortish hair that usually features on guys in romance stories :)
InkWitch chapter 1 . 4/3/2011
firstly, it didnt occur to me at all that Shane would be the romantic interest. :P it was so obvious, god sometimes i'm so stupid :P lol

i like the way you write, its perfect with a few grammar mistakes but its not all that engaging. but ur handling of the story was awesome. so good work :) i liked this story very much
MantraMagazine chapter 1 . 12/30/2010
SO cute! I absolutely love your story. It was a fun, well rounded read. Thank you so much for posting. I like howyou weren't afraid to jump right in there. Though I didn't think Shane was they guy in the beginning, by the end he became the 'totally cute guy you work with and want to see sprawled across your bed at 3 int he afternoon.' ; )

Also, where did the set up for the story come from? Is there a group on here that does story challenges?
schradez007 chapter 1 . 11/12/2010
Oh, well done! That was hilarious. I loved how you made her phobia legitimate - she was genuinely terrified of stickers. I don't think I could pull off a fear of stickers without making it slapstick or a parody. Very fun read :)
whisperedcares chapter 1 . 8/2/2010
Yippee
balloonfista chapter 1 . 5/10/2010
Stickers. wow. did you make that up or does it really exist?

anyway, LOVED IT!

so cute :)

Ri
Icyfire4w5 chapter 1 . 6/16/2009
The narrator is scared of...stickers? Poor thing!
ess3sandra chapter 1 . 3/28/2009
mehe like it!
amezz chapter 1 . 3/25/2009
I loved the last line! That was just perfect! At first I thought that he was being a jerk, cause all I read was the 'whatever' part, but once I read the ending it was like a lightbulb went off, ha. I don't think I have ever met anyone who is afraid of stickers before, that was pretty neat. Actually I don't think I really know anyone at all with weird phobias.. unless people keep those to them selves... who knows.

I really enjoyed your story, it was very well written!
A.K.A. Writer's Block chapter 1 . 3/14/2009
Ahahahahahahahahahaha! This was fantastic and hilarious! I loved it! I'm gonna go devour the stories on your profile!

-aka
luv me like no other chapter 1 . 3/9/2009
totally cute and adorable. :)
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