Reviews for Breathing Underwater
Deadlover chapter 1 . 2/15/2009
Amazingly wonderful. I Love it!
faultlessimperfection chapter 24 . 11/3/2008
A better review will have to come later. At the moment I am in a state of shock. The clock is blinking nearly 2am and I have to be up again in 4 hours but I had to finish this story. Your writing is beautiful, absolutely beautiful. There's a few hiccups here and there, the sort of stuff an editor or a beta-reader picks up, but the writing... The writing is just stunning. Keep writing, find other writers to talk, read, and review with. Your writing is not only publishable, its poetic. Its unpolished, you can feel that the style isn't fully developed yet, but it is beautiful, absolutely heartbreakingly beautiful.

Keep writing,

centenarian chapter 17 . 10/12/2008
I don't know how to explan it.

It touched me. Especially the last part. It made me look at my life and see that everything I consider important...doesn't really matter that much and all the things that really matter...i just take them for granted.

It was a wonderful, awesome story.

Sometimes though, the sentences tend to get a little run-on. They get too long for comfort and i skip some parts because of it. Still, the story's good.

I'd really like to know though. Does Devon really find Aidan in the end? chapter 24 . 7/23/2008

Dude.. This was... I... Hm.. I won't go searching for the right words, because it doesn't matter. It was beautiful, however, it was touching, and slightly numbing. I feel odd, after reading it.

I don't know what to say. It's really beautiful.

Is this actually the end?

Of Devon and Aidan. Actually the last thing you'll write about them?

I think this is a beautiful ending, and the story really did have meaning, and I enjoyed reading it immensely. But, as the simple story of Devon and Aiden, as the characters we know, I think it's a bit... Odd to just stop there. The ending, as I said.. It was beautiful, and a good way to end it. But i don't feel like the actual story should have ended here.

I don't know.

I'm really sad about those two. Faith.. It's a beautiful thing, but the reality is he'll never just... end up where Aidan is, right?

And after everything Devon's done, leaving without saying goodbye? It's... Doesn't make much sense.

Is this really the end?
Musickk Darling chapter 24 . 7/23/2008
Beautiful ending, beautiful story.

I'm already thinking about re-reading it all over again :)
MissMurder424 chapter 24 . 7/22/2008
one of the best stories i have read
Miss Curiosity chapter 22 . 7/16/2008
I've been following your story since the first day you wrote it on Quizilla before it turned into some kind of writing-monster-thing. I've loved the way how all the characters developed especially Devon (: It's boring when the main character stays the same throughout the whole story.
Brezzia chapter 22 . 7/15/2008
Wonderful :) I was so excited when I saw that you updated, and I'm happy to say that I certainly wasn't disappointed!

Looking forward to the next chapter,

TheLadyBelle chapter 22 . 7/15/2008
brilliant as usual!

i was so looking forward to this!
MissMurder424 chapter 22 . 7/15/2008
Devon has been going thrugh alot since Aiden left he's finally figuring out stuff on his own well cant wait till the next chapter chapter 22 . 7/15/2008
I took it for granted that Aidan would just come back after awhile, but I guess not, after this.

...I'm really glad you updated, it's been a short while. I just don't get it. While Aidan's gone, Devon will change immensely. It's inevitable. How do they plan on picking up the relationship again after that?

As I see it, it's pretty much impossible. But, well, what do I know. lol.

Either way, I really enjoyed reading the chapter; I'll be waiting for more.


Musickk Darling chapter 22 . 7/15/2008
Good chapter. Ugh i can't stand that Devon has to do all these things by himself even though its what he needs most. I like how comlex his relationship is with Maddie...its rather inexplicable which makes it all the more realistic.

I'm seriously rooting for him.

Already looking forward to the next chapter :)
Rino-chan chapter 21 . 6/29/2008
It's a deep story. Very deep.

I think what I like most about the story is how you got the thoughts and emotions down right to the last detail, and because of that, there's really nothing else I can ask for. Even with the slightest bit of detail that Devon notices, you make a point about it and it just lets us connect to him as a character which is just amazing.

You've got the other descriptions down at the right level - not too much, not too limited either, and it allows a lot of imagination to take place where picturing the whole thing is concerned. I honestly love this story, and the stuff that happens in it, and what Devon is learning about himself. It's deep.

DontStandCloseToMe chapter 21 . 6/24/2008
I seriously just adore the stories you write.

And this is by far my favorite story you've ever written.

I'm jumping in my seat just waiting for the next chapter. ]
Second to the Left chapter 21 . 6/24/2008
I'm actually really mad right now

And I know that sounds tupid and pissy, but the thing is, I just don't like the way Aidan left.

If he had left... I don't know, just DIFFERENTLY. It was so... awkward and incomplete.

I don't know. Maybe it requires a sequel. Maybe it would be better to leave it here.

I don't know.
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