Reviews for Being with You |
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![]() ![]() ![]() You're right. This piece of fiction is riddled with cliches. And you know what's the scary thing? I was hanging on every last word, and close to tears by the end of the tale. Shiv. Nicely written. I haven't checked your profile to see if you've expanded this, but I do think you can expand this into the prequel. I'd really like to know how they met. |
![]() ![]() ![]() SHIT. you made me cry. Like all out crying with tears and I just hugged my dog and squeezed the living daylights out of him. It was so sweet. Not cliche at all. Okay maybe a little but I mean, it was really sweet. You just made me want to get out there and find the ONE for me. Ugh. I love your stories Keep it up! |
![]() ![]() Wowsers. I am totally in love with this! It was fantastic fatacstics fantastic. |
![]() ![]() ![]() wow, lol. This is seriously the best one-shot i've ever read on fictionpress. Keep up the good work! This is going straight to my favourites. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Wow I loved this! Didn't strike me as overly cliche because you pulled it off so well. And I love Larissa! She's such a strong person. Awesome job :D |
![]() ![]() ![]() aw! that was just complete awwness! |
![]() ![]() ![]() wow, larissa's so understanding :c love it :) |
![]() ![]() ![]() sweet like honey |
![]() ![]() ![]() aw yeah it's a cliche but it's so cute! - good job! -MiScHiEvOuS sMiLeS |
![]() ![]() ![]() Oh. My. God. I think I'm gonna cry. This was so infinitely sweet! There were some misplaced words that threw me for a loop, but other than that, this story was incredible. So. Cute! Great job! This so goes on my Fav list! |
![]() ![]() ![]() I don't think this was cliche, not at all. In fact, I was expecting Brandon to break her heart, and Larissa to end up with Kirk, haha. THAT would've been cliche. But this? Not really. I mean, sure, Brandon being the rich, arrogant male is a bit cliche.. but what's a romance without some cliche? Boring, that's what it is. XD So good job! I like this a lot, and I'm really, really proud of Brandon as a character. Not many guys would be able to figure out that they love their current girlfriend more, so that's pretty impressive. Keep up the good work! |
![]() ![]() ![]() Charming, sad and sweet, hope it wins. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Aw...that was really cute. I'm not really into cliche stuff, but you have to give yourself credit, because this was far from it. The story and the characters were very realistic. I loved Larissa for her courage. And I also liked how you didn't end it all neat and tidy. There are feelings that can never be erased, and I'm glad that you addressed that in your story. Thank you for this. Keep writing! ) |
![]() ![]() ASDFJKL;Twas great! The only critisism I have though is where you wrote:“Your masculinity outstands me,” I said, laughing lightly. - - - I think you meant astounds me not outstands - not sure though but like I said...yeah...rambling, moving on. Otherwise. Fabulous ;]Keep up ze good work, ne? |
![]() ![]() ![]() This story was really well written and I really enjpyed this one-shot ! |