|Reviews for shiver, and inhale|
| Amarone chapter 1 . 6/23/2008
Beautiful, heartfelt emotion. Your words are elegant, and flowing. I simply love the line, "i love these nights, because it’s easier to convince myself/that you love me.", and the references to the orca and the caged bird. Nicely done :)
Thanks for the review and fav. :)
| Durak chapter 1 . 6/22/2008
Nice stuff. It's... an interesting version of a traditional love poem. )
I like the contrast in how the "sky" is safer than the "cage", how the orca craves the "cold" of the sea, even though, of course, the cage and aquarium are both literally safer.
I also like the e.e. cummings capitalization-less-ness.
I'm not entirely sure what to critique. It gets across the emotion well, the scene is well-laid, and I like the similes.
| Doxology chapter 1 . 6/22/2008
I like this. It tells a story in a few words that keeps people wondering and making stuff up, but when stripped down it's just a love song. I loved the last three lines the most.