Wow! I remember reading your stuff on Quizilla, but I hadn't kept up with your writings. I really love this "new" (to me at least :P) story. Keep up the good work.

It's...attention holding. Besides the obvious captive vampire and good cop/ bad cap interrogation im not sure whats she is there for or how she got there. But it prolly was your intention not to reveal it in the first chappie? All in all solid work keep it up!