That was surprisingly random.. And yet funny all the same.

Love this story.

So funny, made me laugh a lot. Would love to draw some character designs (If you'll let me), and the only thing I'd change is some of the spellings/grammar.

Overall it was epic :)

I enjoyed the first 2 chapters and I will definitely continue reading. :)

I loved this story! It deserves so much more reviews than it has!

So I feel like reviewing again after reading the other reviews. First of all, I lolal during this story. Also, I'm not aware of any stories in which the humor is entirely based on jokes. I mean, no one stops in the middle of the chapter and goes "Knock knock." It just doesn't work like that. And the Peanut Butter thing? It was totally crucial to the plot! David's repeated dreams about peanut butter symbolized his growing confidence and coming into terms with his own ability to take charge of the situation and create a happy outcome. In his final dream he faced his ultimate fear, but could not overcome them entirely. Which only means he has room to grow in the next book!

Yours Truly,

Ms. Critic

I refuse to say how much I loved this story. I am very upset. David and Madison never got their movie date. I will never read another story by this author ever again. Also, soldier is spelled with an I. An I! soldIer. SOLDIER! Not solder. GET IT RIGHT!

Sorry, not a review, but...

Bob Evans: Ha, you're probably right. I need to watch less British comedies.

Now that I reread this story, though, I think it sounds alot like a cartoon episode. It would be funnier as a cartoon, fo' sho'.

Okay, so I was expecting some kind of horrible cliff hanger ending that would only be resolved by the next story. But you successfully resolved this plot, while leaving room open for more adventure. UNLIKE Wreath 2, where it ended with the Master Captain racing back to Marva, and Commander Sandra and the Mediator still on Wreath trying to stop the Promise Alliance from taking over the universe!

Still, the whole Peanut Butter thing makes no sense. I mean, I guess if it was some kind of huge subplot in the whole saga, but I'm pretty sure the magical stone had nothing to do with it, so I don't know what the point of this story was except for introducing the characters and concepts for the later stories. So...you better write more! Or else!

~Bob Evans

P.S. Fudge on 10 Dimes. Apparently the humor in here was too silly for his tastes. Maybe he should go find some more "tasteful" humor.

well well it's over or is it? i don't know... and that was the only part with the peanut butter 8p anywho good story.

keep up the good work!

I completely loved it. A lot. Continue, please! That was so funny. Thanks for writing it!

-T.I.N.

I loved it! You should make a 2nd one. For anyone who see this should take a look at my storys.

Honestly... It wasn't very good.

Pretty much all of the humor was based off of words like 'Nachos' and dumb conversations. It was like reading a grocery list.

Also, there are no actual jokes in it. If you find commercial references and thinking flip-flops funny, I can understand that, but most intelligent people don't.

Is that it? is there more? when dose the peanut butter come into play? I WANT TO KNOW!

Hilarious. I like the whole "this hasn't been invented stuff" and the "if this becomes a movie" and pretty much everything. Great!

-T.I.N.

heh dufartt things he is fat, and a big werid mountain what next will you think of...

Keep up the good work