omg, cliff hanger! could it possibly be dufartt? or is it just somebody with a sinister voice?

i loved the whole "your face" thing. i do it all the time, but i use "your mom" instead of "your face". love the story, as always.

Ha, this has the classic humor of a R.E.D./Double-A comedy. Although the grammar needs some serious work in places, and sometimes it tends to drift from a narrative to a script, it still keeps me laughing. Vaztrosha is my favorite character by far (even if she is the most forgotten in the whole story). I can't help but make the Harry Potter connections with David, Lenny, and Madison, but I'm still trying to figure out who Cat, Leroy, and Captain Smith represent (although I suspect one of them is that of Snape).

I'm still trying to figure out where the Peanut Butter comes into the whole grand scheme of things, but I suppose we'll find out eventually, won't we? And ya know it's gonna be epic when this is only Book 1.

~Bob Evans

P.S. Congrats! I'm Favoriting it!

Lol. This is freaking hiliarious.

I love it! Very funny. The characters and plot are great.

-T.I.N.

It's- WHAT IT"S WHAT? good chapters very funny~

Keep up the good work!

Aww...no cat? I was counting on the cat being there the whole time! Still, this is really funny.

That story was horrible. It was so bad i gagged. then i read it to my dog and he puked!

omg, that happened to me yesterday! well, no i did not go on a quest to find a magic stone, and nor did i wander through the cave with glowing eyes, but i did go to the store to buy some bread and the guy only gave me change for a 10 instead of a 20. yeah. thats my story.

anyways, awesome tale, and i love the random commercials :) kep it up.

Dufartt heheheeheheheehehehehhehe...hehe I like the giant butterfly it's so cool and why did he need a cough drop oh yeah never mind... all in all good chapter

Keep up the good work!

Wow

I didn't know there was a WHOLE world without hotdogs!

omg

I mean don't they know what they're missing?

But you had alot of new age stuff

I think thats what made it funi

And I like the lil comments in ()

HEHEHE

Good work

I liked it

David smart? Thats crazy! and who is david baxon? anywho good chapter but why didn't they have a commercial for the Frosted Slivers?

So who is this person on the magic mirror which is like a cell phone hehe and yes I do believe that david would have to run a lot. what ever happened to grandpa redcaps flip-flops?

This story is so awesome. It's like I helped write it or something. Oh wait. I did! Well, I guess this means I can't reveiw anymore. *grumbles* Oh well. I'll just go eat some Comida-Nachos.

Wait but his grandpa is dead wait is he going to tell her that in the next chapter and then she will say something about him. Anywho back to this chapter... So is grandpa redcap a ghost and visited David in his dreams?

Wow again I like pizza! and why are you doing product placement?

Oh and in my last review I had a typo so now you know and you don't have to think i'm stupid ( 8