Reviews for june
Aslan Israel chapter 1 . 6/28/2008
I love the context you used for the word 'whipping'... very unique. It's nice to hear different words.
TaltushMeiMei chapter 1 . 6/26/2008
I'll admit that I only looked at this because I recently started writing a poem for every month, based on nature during the month and the nature of the month. But I'm glad I looked at this poem, because I kind of like it. It's small, vivid, descriptive, but leaves a strong impression. I do wonder, though, if the word in the last line is supposed to be "swinging" or "singing". Either way, it works pretty well, I suppose. Anyways, nice job.
My Dear Adora chapter 1 . 6/25/2008
I really like the imagery in this. The metaphor at the beginning worked really well. It all comes together very nicely.