Reviews for Prayer
poetofpain chapter 1 . 7/5/2008
I like 's simple and sweet
Candiferous chapter 1 . 6/30/2008
i might change like two words here and there to help it flow better, but otherwise, this piece is so BOSS. i love it. what a simple, great poem.
Faith Adeline chapter 1 . 6/29/2008
good piece, well written :)

mate.feed.kill.repeat chapter 1 . 6/28/2008
This was a really sweet read. ]

I like how you turned a classic prayer into this rhythmic piece.

A few of your lines need revision. I think you just went through them too fast:

-"the Lord might say ive done okay" - "the lord might say I've done okay"

-"the good Lord says im on my way" - "the good Lord says I'm on my way."

Very nice piece.