|Reviews for Your Premonitions|
| ten pts above average chapter 1 . 6/29/2008
I wish I could really feel this...
| miscellanea chapter 1 . 6/29/2008
I liked the line 'almost hugging the shadows on the wall.' That was a nice image and it made the scene more intimate. In the rest of my poem I think you could do some fine tuning with your world choice. At times it seemed a little bit too straight-to-the-point because of the common languaged you used. I thought that the last two lines clinched the poem well - really well. In your edits (if you decide to do them) I forbid you to touch those lines. Keep writing!
| fatbird33 chapter 1 . 6/29/2008
| Random-Idiocity chapter 1 . 6/29/2008
Lovely piece you have here. ''in a never-ending embrace'' I thought was a wonderful line, good job on keeping flow. Keep it up!