Reviews for Tortoise
no.peace.los.angeles chapter 1 . 7/1/2008
I like the repetition in the phrases and the assonance in this. They work well to keep with the slow/tortoise theme. Very nicely constructed. I especially like how you phrased some of the lines, like, "Slower than molasses, you." I always think unique phrasing like that makes things sound more poetic and is somehow more honest. Not sure if that makes sense, but oh well. Lovely piece. Keep writing! :)