Reviews for Vampire Story |
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![]() ![]() ![]() From what I've read of your story, I've found the basic idea to be interesting, though possibly cliché depending on what you write later, not that that's necessarily a bad thing. As for your actual writing, I'd like to say your description of the setting and characters and so on seems to be a bit blunt and choppy. I also don't really get the feeling that you're getting into character so it feels awkward for the reader to be involved in the story. There were a few grammar mistakes here and there, but that's ok. I'll be looking forward to the next chapter, so good luck and update soon. -Katie |