Reviews for work in progress
shadow-of-a-trackless-sea chapter 1 . 7/6/2008
I really like this especially how you wrap it up so ncely at the end.
Faith Adeline chapter 1 . 7/2/2008
I like this, good job :)

simpleplan13 chapter 1 . 7/2/2008
"and the building is just as incomplete/as the plans for it." I didn't like incomplete because you just used complete. Also I don't think you need the second line, it just seemed odd to me. I think you could put the first one with the line after those two, though. Just a thought.

"(forever and two days is more time/that what they have to complete this place)" I think you mean than not that

I like this a lot. The metaphor is really interesting, well extended and fit perfectly. It's a really creative piece.
Random-Idiocity chapter 1 . 7/2/2008
Awesome job on this, makes me think of all the things that are incomplete. Keep it Up!
Kate Marshall chapter 1 . 7/2/2008
I love it. I love all your stuff. (Well, I haven't read *all* your stuff- there's like almost 300)