|Reviews for Anthems for a Seventeen Year Old Girl|
| We Used To Wait chapter 2 . 8/30/2009
Mm, I like how not-cliche or predictable it is. A lot of elements in this story are original. I like it! And Remy's unrequited feelings just suck. Ftw, 'Remy' is an awesome name.
| We Used To Wait chapter 1 . 8/30/2009
Okay, you won my interest. I love how you write. Just something about this writing style almost gets to me. She not dramatic or anything. I love that. :)
Sad, about Edwin. I hate it when the guy dies.
| sunsetting chapter 6 . 8/28/2009
so.. i'm not really good at this review-for-every-chapter stuff, but i'll try to give it a go, since i really like this.. yeah. anyway.
um. this is probably just me (because i have an awful attention span) but long paragraphs are kind of a turnoff. my eyes kind of glaze over long blocks of texts :x but that really might just be me.
but i liked all the character interaction in here. especially the first part - remy &her mother. i like that her mother had past, even though you kind of formatted it into a sorta "tell/not show" way.. but it kind of worked, i think. i really liked some of the lines, though, ex: "She loved Tennessee Williams and Chekhov and believed that the heartbreak and tragedies illustrated by each playwright..." & "All of her acting skills couldn’t withstand the charm of Charlie Gardener.", to name a few. but back to character interaction. i like how obvs that remy's fam is so disjointed right now and just.. there, you know? like they all live under the same roof but nothing more. uh yeah. i like that.
&the letter remy writes to edwin. that's just really.. incred. i love the ideas and words and cynicism in here :) so realistic. i mean, i actually think like this kinda stuff - can easily relate, but not to that extent, you know?
&dean. ohmann this is so good. and the dialogue - throughout the chapter/story i mean - it's really.. realistic? that's not really the word i'm looking for, but yeah, it's good.
so uh, yeah. personally, it's your poetry, the way you string words, that i really really love. the present-tense helps too, i think. but anyhow, i'm starting to like remy too. uhh. i can't really think of any critique or concrit or whatever right now, but keep it up 'cause i'd reallyreally/really/ like to see more of this !
..and sorry if this reviews turns out sort of long. :x
| mlle wolf chapter 6 . 8/28/2009
Poor Remy, Poor Dean. I really hope you write more.
| Xenn.be.Twisted chapter 6 . 8/26/2009
Damn. This is really interesting. I love the debates over... Life, I guess. Very deep.
Please, write more,
| Killian I chapter 1 . 8/26/2009
I like this; it flows well and Remy's voice is very real.
| Raingypsy chapter 4 . 8/10/2009
Hey. this is really good. I'm interested to read more.
Please update soon!
| Jada Writes chapter 4 . 8/7/2009
Oh my gosh, I can't wait to meet Dean again! Thanks for another great chapter, and I hope for another one soon!
| swellhats chapter 4 . 8/6/2009
i love the picture you're painting for this story. i'm excited to view the next chapter, update soon!
| too tired to log in chapter 4 . 8/6/2009
hey i just started reading your story and i think you got a good thing going. One question why wasnt Edwin at college and instead at home? Please update soon!
| sunsetting chapter 4 . 8/6/2009
again, i love the way you string words together. really. it's incredible. you write &create all these images that i can, uh, you know, actually see happening. yeah. it's good.
but yeah, anyways, characters &the plot - remy is so self-destructive, and i know you know that, but it's still incredible. in a completely &heartbreakingly realistic way too. i mean, this kind of stuff actually happens, but when you're not the person, then... well. you know how it goes. this really isn't the standard fp fare &it's really devastating. &i know remy doesn't want my sympathy, ha. dean is like that little bit of pre-times.
this story is pretty brill, no joke.
| sunsetting chapter 3 . 8/4/2009
this is so incredible. the way you link ideas &the way it jumps, but not really jumping altogether, is beautiful. your descriptions are so - and i hate to call it this - perfect. it sounds like i'm just saying this for flattery's sake or something, but i really mean it. the words you pick and the way you use them to throw up descriptions are something else entirely. if i could ¬ feel bad about it, i would steal some of these lines. &remy's reaction/s to her brother's death... so good. i love the way you put together this whole thing so far... it's definitely not cookie-cutter and it's so tragic and devastating to see this kind of transformation... and i just want to read more of it.
but well, on a technicalities note, since you're considering publishing- sometimes, there are some words missing & a misplaced modifier here and there, but a read-over can just easily fix that, i think. and that's not much.
but, really, this is really good. i'd definitely like to see more out of this.
| sgwx chapter 3 . 8/4/2009
Well done, once again. I can find no faults to this. Keep it coming!
P.S. If you're interested in getting this published... have you considered posting this up on authonomy? You'll get more legitimate criticism from editors, writers, and the likes.
| Wakao chapter 3 . 8/3/2009
You're an incredible writer.
I love all the details in this story, and the way you use words. Can't wait to read more.
| Jada Writes chapter 2 . 8/3/2009
Your three-dimensional characters are amazing. I can't wait for the next chapter.