Reviews for The Big Sleep
no.peace.los.angeles chapter 1 . 7/6/2008
Love the last line. Just cute. Well, maybe cute isn't the right word, but I think you know what I mean. Love the stream-of-consciousness feel to this, how it feels like an equation or something, how that fits so well with "Coffee is necessary to/produce movement." The line breaks could use some work, in my opinion, but then again, you can tell a lot about a poet through their line breaks and I'm sure you had a reason for putting them where you did. Overall, a very nice, intelligent piece. Keep writing! :)